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Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more influence on children&#0 v.1

Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more influence on children&#0 v. 1
Global warming has been increasing concern all over the world because mankind is depleting nature in different ways. Both individual and governments can take necessary measures to solve this issue. However, human being activities have various bad effects on earth’s nature. These activities include gas emission from factories, pollution from vehicles, garbage waste thrown in recycling, etc. Despite that, people use products such as air conditioner, refrigerators for their own convenience, but ignoring the effects of these products have on the environment. The government should take essential actions to address environmental issues. The government could impose taxes on vehicle drivers to reduce the crowd in cities along with pollution. For example, in the UK, especially in London city, local municipality imposed green taxes on vehicles who drive in the city. Public transportation should be improved by increasing the services of buses, trains, etc. An individual should participate in the cause of climate changes. People should give emphasis to cycling and even decrease flying and driving of vehicles, which means importance should be given to battery cars. If the public try to do recycling properly and consume eco- friendly goods, it can lead to a reduction in climate changes to some extent. As a living being, this is our moral responsibility to protect nature. On the other hand, companies should reduce use eco- friendly way to avoid the emission of carbon dioxide gases in the atmosphere, which means solar, wind energy should be utilized more. In conclusion, the climate has been drastically changed because of the effect of pollution and global warming. While the government can appear stricter towards this, individuals might show more careful and alert behaviour to save the earth's climate.
Global warming has been increasing concern all over the world
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because
mankind is depleting nature in
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different
ways. Both individual and
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governments
can take necessary measures to solve this issue.

However
, human being activities have various
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
effects on earth’s nature. These activities include gas emission from factories, pollution from
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vehicles
, garbage waste thrown in recycling, etc. Despite that,
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people
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use
products such as air conditioner, refrigerators for their
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own
convenience,
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but
ignoring the effects of these products have on the environment.

The
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government
should take essential actions to address environmental issues. The
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government
could impose taxes on
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vehicle
drivers to
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reduce
the crowd in cities along with pollution.
For example
, in the UK,
especially
in London city, local municipality imposed green taxes on
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vehicles
who drive in the city. Public transportation should be
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improved
by increasing the services of buses, trains, etc.

An individual should participate in the cause of
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climate
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changes
.
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People
should give emphasis to cycling and even decrease flying and driving of
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vehicles
, which means importance should be
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given
to battery cars. If the public try to
The usual collocation for an activity ending in "-ing" is "go" not "do" or "play." Revise: "go recycling".
do recycling
properly
and consume
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eco
- friendly
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goods
, it can lead to a reduction in
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climate
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changes
to
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some
extent. As a living being, this is our moral responsibility to protect nature.
On the other hand
,
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companies
should
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reduce
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use
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eco
- friendly way to avoid the emission of carbon dioxide gases in the atmosphere, which means solar, wind energy should
be utilized
more.

In conclusion
, the
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climate
has been
drastically
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changed
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because
of the effect of pollution and global warming. While the
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government
can appear stricter towards this, individuals might
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show
more careful and alert
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behaviour
to save the earth's
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climate
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more influence on children&#0 v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
282 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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