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Some people believe that governments should make the ​investment in building public libraries in every town, while others think it is a waste of money because we have access to information via the Internet. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that governments should make the ​investment in building public libraries in every town, while others think it is a waste of money because we have access to information via the Internet. GMLLw
As budget pressures felt by the publicly funded system are increasing, there has been much discussion about whether the government should allocate an enormous amount of money to the maintenance of public libraries in every city or not. While I accept that there are benefits and drawbacks of this decision, I would argue that it is better not to invest. On the one hand, the value of public libraries in popularizing education cannot be underestimated. Firstly, libraries, as is pervasively known, provide fair access for the public to gain knowledge and skills regardless of how old they are, how much they earn and whether they are educated or not. To some extent, libraries are like the land of opportunity, where anyone can become educated and can realize their dream of personal success. Secondly, not all the books can digitized, particularly those old books, and public libraries contain a wide range of materials available to be borrowed for free. For example, old books, audiovisual or limited edition materials are often hard to find on the Internet; these can only be found in libraries. On the other hand, I believe that it is wasteful money to finance in building public libraries. First, people can search for the knowledge they want to acquire and read e-books via the Internet easily. For instance, users only put some key-words, and all related information will come up eventually within a few seconds. Furthermore, viewed from the angle of economics, fund public libraries need a vast amount of money but cannot bring any economic return. In particular, the administrations should spend money to build schools, hospitals…, which both bring social and economic value. In conclusion, although both using public libraries and connecting to knowledge through the Internet are advantageous in their own ways, it seems to me that it is better to not fund a large amount of money in building public libraries.
As budget pressures felt by the
publicly
funded system are increasing, there has been much discussion about whether the
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government
should allocate an enormous amount of
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money
to the maintenance of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
libraries in every city or not. While I accept that there are benefits and drawbacks of this decision, I would argue that it is better not to invest.

On the one hand, the value of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
libraries in popularizing education cannot
be underestimated
.
Firstly
, libraries, as is
pervasively
known, provide
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fair
access for the
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public
to gain knowledge and
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skills
regardless of how
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old
they are, how much they earn and whether they
are educated
or not. To
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some
extent, libraries are like the land of opportunity, where anyone can become educated and can realize their dream of personal success.
Secondly
, not all the books can digitized,
particularly
those
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old
books, and
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public
libraries contain a wide range of materials available to
be borrowed
for free.
For example
,
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old
books, audiovisual or limited edition materials are
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often
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hard
to find on the Internet; these can
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only
be found
in libraries.

On the other hand
, I believe that it is wasteful
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money
to finance in building
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public
libraries.
First
,
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people
can search for the knowledge they want to acquire and read e-books via the Internet
easily
.
For instance
, users
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only
put
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some
key-words, and all related information will
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come
up
eventually
within a few seconds.
Furthermore
, viewed from the angle of economics, fund
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public
libraries need a vast amount of
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money
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but
cannot bring any economic return.
In particular
, the administrations should spend
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
to build schools, hospitals…, which both bring social and economic value.

In conclusion
, although both using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
libraries and connecting to knowledge through the Internet are advantageous in their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
ways, it seems to me that it is better to not fund a large amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
in building
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
libraries.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that governments should make the ​investment in building public libraries in every town, while others think it is a waste of money because we have access to information via the Internet.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
7
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