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Some people believe that giving longer prison sentences is the best way to reduce crime. Others believe that there are better ways to reduce crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, crime rate has been increasing over the years. The government should take alternative ways and come up with different solutions. Most of the people tend to be afraid to even come out of the house alone espeacially at nights. Although some people think that giving longer prison sentences is the best way to reduce crime. For example a rapist or murderer can be given life long jail will think twice before doing the crime which it helps innocent people and teenagers to live in a safe world. For children below 18 years and teenagers caught in drug-trafficking, the government can provide them free education and employment so that they can start new life and change themselves as they grow up. Moreover, we can For others they think that they are better ways to reduce crimes. Such as providing guns or other kinds of harmful items should be bought by taking control under the police department and to be licensed in all countries. The main cause increasing crimes is because of movies we see everyday as it affects the mindset of people. The government should provide guidelines and take it more seriously. For cases like chain snatching, stealing and robbery we should them in NGOs which helps to decrease criminals. In my oppinion, I would agree to both the views. Howeever, criminals should be given life imprisionment but also should give an opportunity to give them second chance for the mistakes they have done without thinking. So government must take steps carefully and should the system of punnishment.
Nowadays,
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crime
rate has been increasing over the years. The
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government
should take alternative ways and
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different
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people
tend to be afraid to even
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come
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espeacially
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people
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that giving longer prison sentences is the best way to
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reduce
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crime
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a rapist or murderer can be
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given
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twice
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crime
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innocent
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people
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teenagers
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in a safe world. For children below 18 years and
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teenagers
caught in drug-trafficking, the
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government
can provide them free education and employment
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so
that they can
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start
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change
themselves as they grow up.
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that they are better ways to
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reduce
crimes.

Such as providing guns or other kinds of harmful items should be
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bought
by taking control under the police department and to
be licensed
in all countries. The main cause increasing
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crimes
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because
of movies we
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as it affects the mindset of
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people
. The
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government
should provide guidelines and take it more
seriously
.

For cases like chain snatching, stealing and robbery we should them in NGOs which
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helps
to decrease criminals.

In my
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oppinion
, I would
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agree
to both the views.
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life
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government
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punnishment
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IELTS essay Some people believe that giving longer prison sentences is the best way to reduce crime. Others believe that there are better ways to reduce crime.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
258 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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