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Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day. Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

These days, the usage of phones during schools days has increased. While some people argue that usage of mobile phones in school should be prohibited, others claim that it has no damaging effect of using mobile phones in school days. I believe that in most cases children doesn't utilize it for unnecessary things. Firstly, I think students should have a right of bringing a cell phone to school because its theirs. They have resoponsibilty. If they don't cause trouble with it I think they should be allowed because also its really convenient for emergencies and also the school phones might be out of service or they might not have access to one so bringing a cell phone is handy also you could use it to help for your classes like a calculator or a flashlight. We are living in the twenty first century, people have to recognize that we are getting more into technology and getting rid of paper and pencil. Electronic devices are moving there way into our lives and there’s nothing we can do to stop it. Using technology in class is definitely a yes. There’s so much more you can do when using things like iPod’s, cellphones and other electronic devices. Yes students will be off task sometimes but they will still get there work done. Taking everything into consideration that children should be allowed using mobile phones in school days, it makes them genius.
These days, the usage of
phones
during
schools
days has increased. While
some
people
argue that usage of mobile
phones
in
school
should
be prohibited
, others claim that it has no damaging effect of using mobile
phones
in
school
days. I believe that
in most cases
children doesn't utilize it for unnecessary things.

Firstly
, I
think
students should have a right of bringing a cell
phone
to
school
because
its
theirs. They have
resoponsibilty
. If they don't cause trouble with
it
I
think
they should be
allowed
because
also
its
really
convenient for emergencies and
also
the
school
phones
might be out of
service or
they might not have access to one
so
bringing a cell
phone
is handy
also
you could
use
it to
help
for your classes like a calculator or a flashlight.

We are living in the twenty
first
century,
people
have to
recognize that we are getting more into technology and getting rid of paper and pencil. Electronic devices are moving there way into our
lives
and there’s nothing we can do to
stop
it.

Using technology in
class
is definitely a yes. There’s
so
much more you can do when using things like iPod’s, cellphones and other electronic devices. Yes students will be off task
sometimes
but
they will
still
get
there work done.

Taking everything into consideration that children should be
allowed
using mobile
phones
in
school
days, it
makes
them genius.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day. Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones.

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