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Some people believe that charities should help people in need no matter where those people in the world. Others felt that these organisations should only serve the people living in the country, where they are based discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that charities should help people in need no matter where those people in the world. Others felt that these organisations should only serve the people living in the country, where they are based q9aD
A charity is supposed to an organisation that provides Help for needy people, charity organisations collect money for those people who have rights on the charity funds. These people are like poor masses, disabled, the people who are needed for food and mostly for orphans. There are several types of charity organisations like orphan charity organisation, health and medical charity system, blood cancer charity where normal people donate their blood for cancer patients and an organisation for disabled people and so on. Firstly, there is a case where some people believe that charities should help people in need no matter where those people are living and secondly others feel that these organisations should only serve the people where they are based. The charity system is not restricted just to an individual country because there are multifarious international charity organisations that are working and funding the entire world. Serving charity under the borders is supposed to be very restricted because in my view charity system should be broadly and not too restrict in a country because there are few countries which don't have charity funding system, consequently they funded by Gold countries and international charity organisations, For instance, if there are a poor country and they also don't have Charity organisation so they should contact to an international charity organisation which is specially organised for poor countries. There are vast masses who are devoting funds to charity organisations and some of these people are from the same country and some people have a link to different countries and they constantly donating funds through the international charity system which is extremely important in this era. In conclusion, charity NGOs should be widespread to the entire world because numerous countries cannot collect funds from their own country because their economic level is extremely weak and people are not well enough to be a donor.
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charity
is supposed
to an
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organisation
that provides
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Help
for needy
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people
,
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charity
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organisations
collect money for those
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people
who have rights on the
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charity
funds.

These
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people
are like poor masses, disabled, the
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people
who
are needed
for food and
mostly
for orphans. There are several types of
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charity
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organisations
like orphan
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charity
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organisation
, health and medical
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charity
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system
, blood cancer
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charity
where normal
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people
donate their blood for cancer patients and an
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organisation
for disabled
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people
and
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so
on.

Firstly
, there is a case where
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some
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people
believe that
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charities
should
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help
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people
in need no matter where those
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people
are living and
secondly
others feel that these
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organisations
should
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only
serve the
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people
where they
are based
.

The
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charity
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system
is not restricted
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just
to an individual
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country
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because
there are multifarious
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international
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charity
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organisations
that are working and funding the entire world. Serving
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charity
under the borders
is supposed
to be
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very
restricted
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because
in my view
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charity
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system
should be
broadly
and not
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too restrict
in a
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country
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because
there are few
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countries
which don't have
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charity
funding
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system
,
consequently
they funded by Gold
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countries
and
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international
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charity
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organisations
,
For instance
, if there are a poor
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country and
they
also
don't have
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Charity
organisation
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so
they should contact to an
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international
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charity
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organisation
which is
specially
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organised
for poor
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countries
. There are vast masses who are devoting funds to
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charity
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organisations
and
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some
of these
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people
are from the same
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country
and
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some
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people
have a link to
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different
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countries and
they
constantly
donating funds through the
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international
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charity
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system
which is
extremely
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important
in this era.

In conclusion
,
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charity
NGOs should be widespread to the entire world
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because
numerous
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countries
cannot collect funds from their
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own
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country
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because
their economic level is
extremely
weak and
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people
are not well
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to be a donor.

IELTS essay Some people believe that charities should help people in need no matter where those people in the world. Others felt that these organisations should only serve the people living in the country, where they are based

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