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some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and uses up the world's fuel resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree??

some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and uses up the world's fuel resources. ? GYMo
It is often argued by a few section of society that travelling through air ought to ban. This is because it has been producing serious problems related to pollution and also used the globe fuel sources. In my view, to a large extent, I agree with the topic, but, in some way, it may backfire as well. The essay will present certain facts and examples to support my viewpoint before coming to conclusions. To begin with, there are ample of reasons behind why air travel should be stop. The first and predominant one is rises in the temperature. In other words, to fly the any air vehicles, it consumes a fuels, which produces more smoke and heat in the air. This is because these bad greenhouse gases affects the normal atmosphere and increase the amount of temperature. To an epitome, whenever any plane travels in the air, it produces the fumes behind it, which looks white in color. It is nothing but the unwanted gases. Thus, it affect in rising in temperature, it should be sign off. Furthermore, the another reason would be extinction of fuels. This is to say that, in everyday if globe resources use not more than sufficient quantity, then it will causes for scarcity of it. To exemplify, consumption would be higher in the air transportation because it goes against gravity. Therefore, it becomes real culprit for our resources. For example, in some areas of world where no availability of fuels to move another country and therefore, they try to avoid these transportation. Hence, to proper use of resources it should be prohibited. However, no one can deny the facility provided by the air transport system. To justify, it accumulate with fastest journey. In order to commute from one place to another far places, it consumes only few hours to reach and provide a fastest route. For example, by plane it just take one day or less to travel from country India to Canada, while by other modes it more than a day. Henceforth, one positive point would be rapid transportation. In conclusion, individuals argue about prohibiting air travel because it yield rise in temperature and serious cause of fuels die out. Whereas, on other way it also give you great time consuming travelling.
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of society that travelling through
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also
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used
the globe
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fuel
sources. In my view, to a large extent, I
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agree
with the topic,
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, in
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way, it may backfire
as well
. The essay will present certain facts and examples to support my viewpoint
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before
coming to conclusions.

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begin
with, there are ample of reasons behind why
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air
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travel
should be
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stop
. The
first
and predominant one is rises in the
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temperature
.
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, to
fly
the any
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air
vehicles, it consumes a
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fuels
, which produces more smoke and heat in the
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air
. This is
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because
these
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bad
greenhouse gases affects the normal atmosphere and increase the amount of
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temperature
. To an epitome, whenever any
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plane
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travels
in the
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air
, it produces the fumes behind it, which looks
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white in color
. It is nothing
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the unwanted gases.
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, it
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affect
in rising in
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temperature
, it should be
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sign
off.

Furthermore
, the another reason would be extinction of
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fuels
. This is to say that, in everyday if globe resources
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use
not more than sufficient quantity, then it will
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causes
for scarcity of it. To exemplify, consumption would be higher in the
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air
transportation
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because
it goes against gravity.
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, it becomes real culprit for our resources.
For example
, in
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some
areas of world where no availability of
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fuels
to
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move
another country and
therefore
, they try to avoid
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these transportation
.
Hence
, to proper
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use
of resources it should
be prohibited
.

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, no one can deny the facility provided by the
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air
transport system. To justify, it
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accumulate
with
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fastest
journey. In order to commute from one place to another far places, it consumes
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few hours to reach and provide
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a
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, by
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plane
it
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just
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take
one day or less to
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travel
from country India to Canada, while by other modes
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it
more than a day. Henceforth, one
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positive
point would be rapid transportation.

In conclusion
, individuals argue about prohibiting
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air
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travel
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because
it
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yield
rise in
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temperature
and serious cause of
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fuels
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die
out.
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, on other way it
also
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give
you great
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time consuming
travelling.
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IELTS essay some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and uses up the world's fuel resources. ?

Essay
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5 paragraphs
378 words
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