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Some people believe online classes are more handy while others think learning in class is productiv and beneficial

Majority of people satisfied from distance learning because of comfortability while others prefer offline education to achieve better knowledge. In this case I am going to provide pros and cons of both side. As we are living in technologically developed period, online classes become pretty handy. It leads to reducing financial cost in learner’s life. Distance learning do not require special uniform or spending money for day expenses like transportation and meals. However, in small cities and towns internet connection will be a problem. As a result, it breeds lack of continuity in learning. In many cases teachers do not have necessary resources for online classes. While most of teachers don’t know basics of using latest technology. In class education has several priorities especially for people who miss sense of freedom. Students will have better productivity because of eye contact with their teacher. Also impact of peers in education quite big, as they can compete between each other. By attending offline classes learner will have a chance practice from chemistry, biology or physics as all tools provided by government. But everyone has their own method of education. Some students will have difficulties with focusing on lesson in group or they can’t express their opinion in front of people. To sum up I believe that both of this study ways have enough reason to be promoted. Of course it would be great if everyone will have a choice of education style that more pleasent.
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people
satisfied from distance learning
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because
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comfortability
while others prefer offline
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education
to achieve better knowledge.
In this case
I am going to provide pros and cons of both side.

As we are living in
technologically
developed period, online
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classes
become pretty handy. It leads to reducing financial cost in learner’s life. Distance learning
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not require special uniform or spending money for day expenses like transportation and meals.
However
, in
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small
cities and towns internet connection will be a problem.
As a result
, it breeds lack of continuity in learning. In
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many
cases teachers do not have necessary resources for online
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classes
.
“While” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
While
After ‘most of’, you should use ‘the’ (“most of the teachers”) or simply say “most teachers”.
most of teachers
don’t know basics of using
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latest
technology.

In
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class
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education
has several priorities
especially
for
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people
who miss sense of freedom. Students will have better productivity
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because
of eye contact with their teacher.
Also
impact of peers in
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education
quite
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big
, as they can compete between each other. By attending offline
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classes
learner will have a chance practice from chemistry, biology or physics as all tools provided by
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government
.
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But
everyone has their
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own
method of
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education
.
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Some
students will have difficulties with focusing on lesson in
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group or
they can’t express their opinion in front of
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people
.

To sum up I believe that both of this study ways have
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enough
reason to
be promoted
. Of
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course it
would be great if everyone will have a choice of
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education
style that more
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pleasent
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IELTS essay Some people believe online classes are more handy while others think learning in class is productiv and beneficial

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
243 words
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