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Some feel that the effects of advertising are positive for individuals and businesses, while others think they are negative. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

It is often argued that there are several benefits for human beings from the advertisement while others say that it has a bad impact on them. This essay will highlight both approaches with detailed analysis of my own perspective. On the one hand, advertising has many good impacts on human's lives such as it give information about new products to people time to time as well as it has a significant role in our economy. To elaborate it, as there are numerous things that are launched in the markets, also the prices often changed of items, consequently, people can get to know about them by the help of advertisement. Moreover, advertisement is a creative industry and it gives employment to many communities which means it has a vital role to slow down the unemployment rate. Even, advertising informs persons about choices they have and use of products. For instance, "Kelling Cornflakes" comes in different flavours or for various age groups, so, the community can choose their one by the help of advertisement. On the other hand, it is also said that it has many drawbacks for individuals. To explanation, the dominant aim of the advertisers is to target young age groups. Children, for example, can be easily influenced by advertisements. They put pressure on their parents to buy the items which they see, some are also so expensive. Moreover, advertising companies manipulate the public 's mind so badly. Capturing the mind of consumers is the main intention of advertisements. Thus by persuading masses that buying a product makes them happier and with higher social status. To conclude, Although advertisements have demerits such as they help people updated with new items and give them employment. But it has also some drawbacks like it badly manipulate their minds. In my opinion, it has more pros for human life as give them the opportunity to get to know about the things of the market and also it helps to solve the issue of unemployment.
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argued that there are several benefits for human beings from the
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advertisement
while others say that it has a
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bad
impact on them. This essay will highlight both approaches with detailed analysis of my
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own
perspective.

On the one hand, advertising has
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many
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good
impacts on human's
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lives
such as it
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give
information about new products to
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people
time to time
as well
as it has a significant role in our economy. To elaborate it, as there are numerous things that
are launched
in the markets,
also
the prices
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often
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changed
of items,
consequently
,
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people
can
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get
to know about them by the
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help
of
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advertisement
.
Moreover
,
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advertisement
is a creative
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industry and
it
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gives
employment to
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many
communities which means it has a vital role to slow down the unemployment rate. Even, advertising informs persons about choices they have and
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use
of products.
For instance
,
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"
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Kelling
Cornflakes
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"
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comes
in
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different
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flavours
or for various age groups,
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so
, the community can choose their one by the
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help
of advertisement.

On the other hand
, it is
also
said that it has
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many
drawbacks for individuals. To explanation, the dominant aim of the advertisers is to target young age groups. Children,
for example
, can be
easily
influenced by
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advertisements
. They put pressure on their parents to
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buy
the items which they
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see
,
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some
are
also
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so
expensive.
Moreover
, advertising
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companies
manipulate the
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public 's
mind
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so
badly
. Capturing the mind of consumers is the main intention of
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advertisements
.
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Thus
by persuading masses that buying a product
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makes
them happier and with higher social status.

To conclude
, Although
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advertisements
have demerits such as they
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help
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people
updated with new items and
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give
them employment.
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But
it has
also
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some
drawbacks like it
badly
manipulate their minds. In my opinion, it has more pros for human life as
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give
them the opportunity to
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get
to know about the things of the market and
also
it
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helps
to solve the issue of unemployment.
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IELTS essay Some feel that the effects of advertising are positive for individuals and businesses, while others think they are negative.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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