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Some companies have uniforms for their staff which must be worn at all times. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion.

In some organisations it is mandatory for an employees to wear uniform in working hours. While poorly designed uniform can create discomfort. This essay totally agrees that uniform is essential because creates a sense of equality among employees. The primary drawback of wearing a uniform is the design that could hurt the employees. In some companies employees are required to wear a tight fitted attire, which could hamper their productivity and organisation performance. Staff are often required to put on attire that are not feasible in summer or winter weather conditions. For Example: Air Eagle Air hostess had a severe allergic reaction and skin rashes in summers due to inappropriate material stitched in it. Despite this, I believe that uniform makes an employee feel an integral part of company. The major benefit of uniform is a sense of parity among employees of junior and executive level positions. It encourages an employees to share their maximum contribution for an organisation success. This would result a strong team building and an improved productivity. For Example: A CEO of Addition Enterprises published in his book that a company productivity had increased to 65% after mandatory induction of uniform in company policy. I believe that uniform able to feel them more secure and it enables them to work harder. To conclude, although uniform can cause serious trouble for employees if it is poorly manufactured. This essay maintains that to maximize the growth of a company, uniform plays a pivotal role by encouraging employees in the long run, as employees would feel a sense of belonging, which is an essential ingredient to increase revenues of organisation.
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it is mandatory for an
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uniform in working hours.
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poorly
designed
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can create

discomfort. This essay
totally
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agrees
that
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uniform
is essential
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because
creates a sense of equality among employees.

The primary drawback of wearing a
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uniform
is the design that could

hurt the
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employees
. In
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some
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companies
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employees
are required
to

wear a tight fitted attire, which could hamper their productivity and

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organisation
performance. Staff are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
required to put on attire

that are not feasible in summer or winter weather conditions. For

Example: Air Eagle Air hostess had a severe allergic reaction and

skin rashes in summers due to inappropriate material stitched in it.

Despite this, I believe that
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uniform
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makes
an
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employee
feel an

integral part of
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company
.

The major benefit of
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uniform
is a sense of parity among
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employees
of

junior and executive level positions. It encourages an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employees
to

share their maximum contribution for an
Possible spelling mistake. ‘organisation’ is British English.
organisation
success. This

would result a strong team building and an
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improved
productivity.

For Example
: A CEO of Addition Enterprises published in his book

that a
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company
productivity had increased to 65% after mandatory

induction of
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uniform
in
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company
policy. I believe that
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uniform
able to

feel them more
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secure and
it enables them to work harder.

To conclude
, although
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uniform
can cause serious trouble for

employees if it is
poorly
manufactured. This essay maintains that to maximize the growth of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
,
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uniform
plays a pivotal role by encouraging
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employees
in

the long run, as
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employees
would feel a sense of belonging, which is

an essential ingredient to increase revenues of
Possible spelling mistake. ‘organisation’ is British English.
organisation
.
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IELTS essay Some companies have uniforms for their staff which must be worn at all times. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
271 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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