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Some believe that more action should be taken to prevent crime, while others feel that crime is being tackled effectively now. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Some believe that more action should be taken to prevent crime, while others feel that crime is being tackled effectively now. EmPD
It is considered by many that some set of rules should be implied in order to reduce the rate of crime, while others believe that the respective department is playing pre-dominant role in the deduction of these unlawful acts. In my opinion, more effective measures should be taken in order to ge t rid of offense. Primarily, it is believed by many that it is indispensable to introduce new tactics and methods to reduce the crime rates. Although the authority is taking necessary actions against this illegal acts, some people tend to commit crimes irrespective of the law. Advancement in technology helping the police department to solve the cases to some extent, However it is not playing a prominent role in reducing the number. For instance, Recently I came across the news on social media that 25 years old woman was brutally raped and killed. These are taking place on regular intervals. The government is unable to predict that coming. On the other hand, it is considered by many that previously we do not have any effective methods to handle the crime rates. Nowadays it is easy to find the culprits with our advancement. So, it is helping the department to solve the cases hastily. New methods playing vital role in tackling the cases in early means. For example, some law-breakers commited bank robbery in the year of 1971 in Mumbai, it took them nearly one long year to solve the case. Whereas, nowadays it takes nearly a day to find the culprits. In my opinion, though the essential measures are taken to deduce the offense. The offenders are not letting their misdeeds down. Though, the technology is improved, I find illegal acts in news papers and on social media. Furthermore, the government should scrutinize these acts and should introduce even more powerful tactics and methods to bring the crime rates to zero. For instance, four culprits were encountered on assaulting a woman sexually. Moreover, same situation took place recently where the police officials are unable to prevent those unlawful acts. To recapitulate, although the police are involved in solving the cases predominantly and effectively. More escalating thoughts and ideas need to be introduced to control these offensive acts.
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many
that
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some
set of
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rules
should
be implied
in order to
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reduce
the
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rate
of
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crime
, while others believe that the respective department is playing
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pre-dominant
role in the deduction of these unlawful
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acts
. In my opinion, more effective measures should
be taken
in order to
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ge t
rid of offense.

Primarily
, it
is believed
by
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many
that it is indispensable to introduce
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new
tactics and
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methods
to
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reduce
the
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crime
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rates
. Although the authority is taking necessary actions against this illegal
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acts
,
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some
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people
tend to commit
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crimes
irrespective of the law. Advancement in technology helping the police department to solve the cases to
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some
extent,
However
it is not playing a prominent role in reducing the number.
For instance
, Recently I came across the
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news
on social media that 25 years
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
woman was
brutally
raped and killed. These are taking place on regular intervals. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
is unable to predict that coming.

On the other hand
, it
is considered
by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
that previously we do not have any effective
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
methods
to handle the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rates
. Nowadays it is easy to find the culprits with our advancement.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, it is helping the department to solve the cases
hastily
.
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New
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methods
playing vital role in tackling the cases in early means.
For example
,
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some
law-breakers
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commited
bank robbery in the year of 1971 in Mumbai, it took them
nearly
one long year to solve the case.
“Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Whereas
, nowadays it takes
nearly
a day to find the culprits.

In my opinion, though the essential measures
are taken
to deduce the offense. The offenders are not letting their misdeeds down. Though, the technology is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
, I find illegal
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acts
in
This word is normally spelled as one.
news papers
and on social media.
Furthermore
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should scrutinize these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
acts
and should introduce even more powerful tactics and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
methods
to bring the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rates
to zero.
For instance
, four culprits
were encountered
on assaulting a woman
sexually
.
Moreover
, same situation took place recently where the police officials are unable to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
those unlawful acts.

To recapitulate, although the police
are involved
in solving the cases
predominantly
and
effectively
. More escalating thoughts and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
need to
be introduced
to control these offensive
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
acts
.
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IELTS essay Some believe that more action should be taken to prevent crime, while others feel that crime is being tackled effectively now.

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369 words
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