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Smoking is gaining widespread popularity among the youth. Discuss the reasons for this problem and give workable solutions.

Smoking is gaining widespread popularity among the youth. Discuss the reasons for this problem and give workable solutions. XG2Pq
In the current times, smoking is developing as a bright concept among the youth and spreading like wildlife. Today in the essay, we would discuss both the concerning issue and the viable solution to the mattress, firstly the adoption of smoking occurs due to influence and it often considered as ‘cool’ which is an incorrect notion and secondly, the immediate need for appreciation awareness campaign as well as the harmful effects of it is necessary to be communicated. To begin with, the millennials have created a mindset of smoking being an essential prerequisite of adulting which would enable them to be widely accepted by their peers due to this reason smoking is gaining popularity. For instance, when students join a new college, they tend to embark upon smoking to make new friends and mingle sufficiently in the college community. Subsequently, it is entitled as the highest degree of ‘coolness’ and acceptable among youth. Some students who opt-out of this addition or even practise are generally outcast and treated differently from the majority such people are labelled to be backward. The notion around smoking is a massive facade which engulfs today’s youth. Although, it is not considered the end of the world as there are alternatives to fight these burning problems such as embracing strong awareness campaigns throughout the younger generation. For example, showing them the harmful effects and long term repercussions which are often displayed in the movie theatre as well as by certain ads. Moreover, it is necessary to create a safe environment for them to grow and discard the feeling of being influenced to adopt wrong habits. However, to conclude we know every action has its own consequences, I believe enabling a healthy environment with proper education about smoking is essential to curb its current growth among the young people as well as helps them make an informed decision not out of pressure.
In the
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current
times,
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smoking
is developing as a bright concept among the youth and spreading like wildlife.
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Today
in the essay, we would discuss both the concerning issue and the viable solution to the mattress,
firstly
the adoption of
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smoking
occurs due to influence and it
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often
considered as ‘cool’ which is an incorrect notion and
secondly
, the immediate need for appreciation awareness campaign
as well
as the harmful effects of it is necessary to
be communicated
.

To
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begin
with, the millennials have created a mindset of
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smoking
being an essential prerequisite of
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adulting
which would enable them to be
widely
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accepted
by their peers due to this reason
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smoking
is gaining popularity.
For instance
, when students
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
a new college, they tend to embark upon
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smoking
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
new friends and mingle
sufficiently
in the college community.
Subsequently
, it
is entitled
as the highest degree of ‘coolness’ and acceptable among youth.
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Some
students who opt-out of this addition or even
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practise
are
generally
outcast and treated
differently
from the majority such
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people
are labelled
to be backward. The notion around
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smoking
is a massive facade which engulfs
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today
’s youth.

Although, it is not considered the
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end
of the world as there are alternatives to fight these burning problems such as embracing strong awareness campaigns throughout the younger generation.
For example
, showing them the harmful effects and long term repercussions which are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
displayed in the movie
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theatre
as well
as by certain ads.
Moreover
, it is necessary to create a safe environment for them to grow and discard the feeling of
being influenced
to adopt
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wrong
habits.

However
,
to conclude
we know every action has its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
consequences, I believe enabling a healthy environment with proper education about
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smoking
is essential to curb its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
growth among the young
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people
as well
as
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helps
them
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make
an informed decision not out of pressure.
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IELTS essay Smoking is gaining widespread popularity among the youth. Discuss the reasons for this problem and give workable solutions.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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