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Smoking is an unhealthy habit and thus must be prohibited in all public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Smoking is an unhealthy habit and thus must be prohibited in all public places. kYRw2
Smoking is considered to be unhealthy but is often done in public settings. There is an opinion that smoking in public places should be banned. I strongly agree with this statement, but at the same time, I believe there are some exceptions and adjustments which have to be considered. Firstly, when people smoke in public, they may harm other people’s health as well. In other words, smoking is one of the habits that not only harms the person doing it, but also those around them. This is particularly disadvantageous when smokers occupy children’s playgrounds or bus stops where bystanders are affected. This can result in an increase in cases of respiratory diseases and people who have asthma may be severely damaged. Secondly, smoking is the cause of lung cancer and a few other sicknesses. People are well aware of the consequences of smoking, but they continue doing so. When they make smoking a part of their regular routine, other people are influenced to pick up this habit as well. In schools, for example, peer pressure forces children aged 11-12 start smoking. As for general statistics, more than a billion people smoke regularly and this number is only predicted to rise, which means a total ban of tobacco in public place could be helpful. Despite arguments made above, I can also add that there are certain exceptions or changes that could be made. For example, in most of the popular restaurants, sections are divided into “smoking” and “non-smoking” areas which means people are given a choice. The similar example can be made about bus stops in some European countries, where the parts of those locations are also split for those who smoke and those who are annoyed by smoking. To sum up, I still believe that banning smoking in general is a great idea, because it only benefits the health of smokers and those who do not smoke. However, banning smoking totally does not seem realistic at this point, but creating separate sections for smokers is already in popular practice.
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people
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people’s
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smoking
is one of the habits that not
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only
harms the person doing it,
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those around them. This is
particularly
disadvantageous when smokers occupy children’s playgrounds or bus
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stops
where bystanders are
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affected
. This can result in an increase in cases of respiratory diseases and
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people
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who
have asthma may be
severely
damaged.

Secondly
,
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smoking
is the cause of lung cancer and a few
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other
sicknesses.
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people
are influenced
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as well
. In schools,
for example
, peer pressure forces children aged 11-12
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smoking
. As for general statistics, more than a billion
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people
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smoke
regularly
and this number is
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only
predicted to rise, which means a total ban of tobacco in
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public
place could be helpful.

Despite arguments made above, I can
also
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add
that there are certain exceptions or
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changes
that could
be made
.
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, in most of the popular restaurants, sections
are divided
into
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“smoking”
and “non-smoking” areas which means
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people
are
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a choice. The similar example can
be made
about bus
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stops
in
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some
European countries, where the parts of those locations are
also
split for those
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who
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smoke
and those
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who
are annoyed
by smoking.

To sum up, I
still
believe that banning
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smoking
in general
is a great
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,
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only
benefits the health of smokers and those
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do not
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smoke
.
However
, banning
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smoking
totally
does not seem realistic at this point,
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but
creating separate sections for smokers is already in popular practice.
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IELTS essay Smoking is an unhealthy habit and thus must be prohibited in all public places.

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