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My computer which was broken

My computer which was broken KwobM

I would like to tell you about my laptop, which got damaged about two years ago. It was gift from my parents on my birthday. It happened when I had to prepare homework for my school. My laptop was a bit old. I was typing something, but suddenly computer had frozen. I tried to turn it on but it was not working. Frankly I was disappointed because of my unfinished work. I didn’t know what to do. I called to my best friend and asked her for advice. She offered me to give her laptop. Then I had to go to her and borrow another laptop to finish my homework. Later on a had to tell about that problem to my parents. They weren’t angry and my father took my computer for the technician. In a week, my computer got repaired but unfortunately, it cost my parents a lot of money. Now I always try to be careful when I using electronic equipment’s

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