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Smokers can cause themselves serious health problems. The choice to smoke is made freely and with knowledge of dangers. Smokers should therefore expect to pay more for medical treatment than non-smokers. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Smokers can cause themselves serious health problems. The choice to smoke is made freely and with knowledge of dangers. Smokers should therefore expect to pay more for medical treatment than non-smokers. 85MQB
Chronic health diseases induced by smokers self. They know the hazard of smoking but always do it. There is an idea that smokers should pay more for medical treatment than nonsmoker. In my opinion, the nonsmoker has the same risk to the smoker who needs similar treatment of health. The government suppose to make a policy to restrict the smoker in a public area instead of charge smokers to pay more for medical treatment. Smokers free to smoking everywhere that affect citizens health. However, I don't think demand smokers pay more for treatment medical is proper. In fact, the nonsmoker has a risk twice from the smoker because nonsmoker immune lower than smoker to face the smoke. The smoker gets rid of the smoke inhaled by people in surround. The second thing is smoking activity should finite as an effort to increase the family economy. Why? limit buy the ciggarette decrease the cost, even they can saving money. On the other hand, that's true smoking is a human rights, but healthy life without smoke too. So, I believe make a policy about restricted smoking in the public area will be relevant instead of charging them to pay more. I heard been that some smokers should smoke everywhere to reduce stress, but I think smoking in a smoking area that is great for two of them. In conclusion, I believe pay more for medical treatment by smokers insufficient to tackele health problems and the danger of nonsmokers.
Chronic
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health
diseases induced by smokers self. They know the hazard of
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smoking
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but
always do it. There is an
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idea
that smokers should
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pay
more for
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medical
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treatment
than nonsmoker. In my opinion, the nonsmoker has the same
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risk
to the smoker who needs similar
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treatment
of
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health
. The
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government
suppose to
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make
a policy to restrict the smoker in a public area
instead
of charge smokers to
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pay
more for
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medical
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treatment
. Smokers free to
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smoking
everywhere that affect citizens
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health
.
However
, I don't
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think
demand smokers
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pay
more for
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treatment
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medical
is proper. In fact, the nonsmoker has a
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risk
twice from the smoker
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because
nonsmoker immune lower than smoker to face the
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smoke
. The smoker
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gets
rid of the
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smoke
inhaled by
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people
in surround. The second thing is
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smoking
activity should finite as an effort to increase the family economy. Why?
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limit
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buy
the
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ciggarette
decrease the cost, even they can
The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: "save"
saving
money.
On the other hand
, that's true
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smoking
is a human rights,
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but
healthy life without
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smoke
too.
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So
, I believe
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make
a policy about restricted
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smoking
in the public area will be relevant
instead
of charging them to
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pay
more. I heard been that
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some
smokers should
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smoke
everywhere to
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reduce
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stress
,
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but
I
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think
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smoking
in a
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smoking
area
that is
great for two of them.
In conclusion
, I believe
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pay
more for
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medical
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treatment
by smokers insufficient to
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tackele
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health
problems and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
danger
of nonsmokers.
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IELTS essay Smokers can cause themselves serious health problems. The choice to smoke is made freely and with knowledge of dangers. Smokers should therefore expect to pay more for medical treatment than non-smokers.

Essay
  American English
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246 words
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