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Should your school ban the use of cell phones on school property?

Should your school ban the use of cell phones on school property? r85Vp
Schools should not ban students from utilizing mobile phones while at school because technology like cell phones and computers helps students learn. In my opinion, I think it is easier for students to use cell phones to communicate with each other. When students can communicate with each other like that, they can help each other on projects. Collaborative environments improve the cognition/performance of students. Having cell phones at school does wonders for learning and exploring. Firstly, in terms of learning and exploring, students can get access to a diversity of resources in different fields so that they could raise their awareness. For example, nowadays, the Internet is a product of technology which really powerful tool for every people in the world to meet and exchange knowledge. Especially Google, we cannot deny that Google is a beyond great machine that plays a crucial role in people’s lives, it brings people to a whole new world. It has a lot of information such as translations, scholarly e-books, dictionaries, and thesauruses. Secondly, technology gadgets in general and mobile phones, in particular, are so convenient. This can be shown in the way that modern students don’t have to bring a heavy backpack when they go to school. Even without carrying textbooks, students still get the same, if not more, information. Convenience may not seem like it is that important; however, the convenience makes learning easier and more accessible for all students. To summarize, cell phones help undergraduate learn better because mobile phones not only aid students to get access to a range of resources in many fields but also do these inconvenient ways. Technology is really developed in the 21 century -- why not take advantage of machinery by letting junior use cell phones to learn? .
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it is easier for
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phones
to communicate with each other. When
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students
can communicate with each other like that, they can
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help
each other on projects. Collaborative environments
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improve
the cognition/performance of
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students
. Having
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cell
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phones
at
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school
does wonders for learning and exploring.

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, in terms of learning and exploring,
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students
can
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get
access to a diversity of resources in
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different
fields
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so
that they could raise their awareness.
For example
, nowadays, the Internet is a product of
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technology
which
really
powerful tool for every
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people
in the world to
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meet
and exchange knowledge.
Especially
Google, we cannot deny that Google is a beyond great machine that plays a crucial role in
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people
’s
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, it brings
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people
to a whole new world. It has
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a lot of
information such as translations,
scholarly
e-books, dictionaries, and thesauruses.

Secondly
,
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gadgets
in general
and mobile
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,
in particular
, are
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convenient. This can
be shown
in the way that modern
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students
don’t
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have to
bring a heavy backpack when they go to
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school
. Even without carrying textbooks,
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still
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get
the same, if not more, information. Convenience may not seem like it is that
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important
;
however
, the convenience
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makes
learning easier and more accessible for all students.

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phones
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help
undergraduate learn better
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because
mobile
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access to a range of resources in
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many
fields
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do these inconvenient ways.
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Technology
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really
developed in the
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21 century
-- why not take advantage of machinery by letting junior
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use
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cell
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phones
to learn?
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IELTS essay Should your school ban the use of cell phones on school property?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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