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Should government provide social and sports facilities

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Companies should provide sports and social facilities for local communities. Open for the model answer. There is a lot of debate about who should pay for recreational facilities in communities. Although some people believe the business sector should provide these facilities, it is my opinion that this is the role of government. Some people think that companies should do more to support local communities. By providing sports and social facilities, it is argued that companies can directly benefit communities. Sports facilities will mean the local people are healthier and social facilities will provide meeting places and cultural attractions which will enrich people’s lives. However, it is likely that companies will see this as a way to advertise and may build facilities simply to improve the image of their brand. Personally, I believe that the government should be responsible for providing recreational facilities. If they are provided by the government, facilities can be advertising free, aimed solely at improving life in the community. Taxes on businesses could be used to fund these facilities, but the building and maintenance should be carried out by the government. All local businesses could be taxed, which would be more effective than just a few companies providing facilities. This solution provides facilities that will improve the community and are paid for by the business sector. In conclusion, it is important that public facilities remain advertising free and so I believe it is better for the government to provide recreational facilities which could be funded by taxes on businesses. Before the government decides what to build in each area, local communities must be consulted to see what they really need and want.
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sports and social facilities for
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local
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communities
. Open for the model answer.

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debate about who should pay for recreational facilities in
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communities
. Although
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some
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people
believe the
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sector should
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provide
these facilities, it is my opinion that this is the role of
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government
.

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Some
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people
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think
that
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companies
should do more to support
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local
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communities
. By providing sports and social facilities, it
is argued
that
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companies
can
directly
benefit
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communities
. Sports facilities will mean the
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local
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people
are healthier and social facilities will
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provide
meeting places and cultural attractions which will enrich
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people’s
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lives
.
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, it is likely that
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companies
will
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see
this as a way to advertise and may build facilities
simply
to
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improve
the image of their brand.

Personally
, I believe that the
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government
should be responsible for providing recreational facilities. If they
are provided
by the
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government
, facilities can be advertising free, aimed
solely
at improving life in the
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community
. Taxes on
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businesses
could be
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used
to fund these facilities,
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but
the building and maintenance should
be carried
out by the
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government
. All
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local
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businesses
could
be taxed
, which would be more effective than
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just
a few
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companies
providing facilities. This solution
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provides
facilities that will
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improve
the
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community
and
are paid
for by the
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business
sector.

In conclusion
, it is
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important
that public facilities remain advertising
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free and
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so
I believe it is better for the
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government
to
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provide
recreational facilities which could
be funded
by taxes on
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businesses
.
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Before
the
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government
decides what to build in each area,
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local
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communities
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must
be consulted
to
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see
what they
really
need and want.
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IELTS essay Should government provide social and sports facilities

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
275 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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