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Several people assert that the main cause of crime is an economically disadvantaged background. However, others say that crime is caused by a person's nature. Discuss both ideas and give your own opinion.

There appears to be a linear relationship between poverty and crime. However, this is not entirely straightforward as a school of thought believe it is the instinct of man that drives criminal activities rather than being poor. I do not think arguments will be enough to support the latter view as I will ventilate below. Children with some forms of misconduct often grow to adults with criminal tendencies. Despite the popularity of this view among some intellectuals, there is no scientifically-proven evidence to date. Again, this body of opinion argues that major offences are not sudden events but would have been preceded by past delinquencies. For example, a serial killer recently apprehended in India said that he loved killing birds as a child and this probably made him see nothing important in human lives. I think this is just a one-off and should not be generalised. On the contrary, many criminals often attribute their activities to economically deprived backgrounds. Besides, the country with the highest crime rate in the world is also the poorest, further adding weight to the link between criminal activities and being poor. Though the other side of the debate posited that nefarious activities are unlikely if one does not exhibit a natural tendency to do so, this does not sound valid because poverty has pushed many with humble beginnings into criminal activities. None of the notorious criminals that faced the firing squad in Swaziland in 2017 was from an affluent background. To conclude, it does not seem legitimate enough to ascribe crime to the character of a person simply because of some traits from childhood or taking pleasure in wicked activities. I think the primary reason for crime is being poor because man must survive and if there is no legal provision for survival, human nature notwithstanding, man will likely resort to criminal ways out.
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straightforward as a school of
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thought
believe it is the instinct of
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man
that drives
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criminal
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activities
rather
than being poor. I do not
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think
arguments will be
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enough
to support the latter view as I will ventilate below.

Children with
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some
forms of misconduct
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often
grow to adults with
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criminal
tendencies. Despite the popularity of this view among
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some
intellectuals, there is no
scientifically
-proven evidence to date. Again, this body of opinion argues that major
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offences
are not sudden
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events
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but
would have
been preceded
by past delinquencies.
For example
, a serial killer recently apprehended in India said that he
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loved
killing birds as a child and this
probably
made him
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see
nothing
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important
in human
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lives
. I
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think
this is
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just
a one-off and should not be
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generalised
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,
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many
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criminals
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often
attribute their
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activities
to
economically
deprived backgrounds.
Besides
, the country with the highest
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crime
rate in the world is
also
the poorest,
further
adding weight to the link between
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criminal
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activities
and being poor. Though the other side of the debate posited that nefarious
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activities
are unlikely if one does not exhibit a natural tendency to do
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so
, this does not sound valid
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because
poverty has pushed
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many
with humble beginnings into
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criminal
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activities
. None of the notorious
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criminals
that faced the firing squad in Swaziland in 2017 was from an affluent background.

To conclude
, it does not seem legitimate
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enough
to ascribe
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crime
to the character of a person
simply
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because
of
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some
traits from childhood or taking pleasure in wicked
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activities
. I
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think
the primary reason for
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crime
is being poor
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because
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man
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must
survive and if there is no legal provision for survival, human nature notwithstanding,
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man
will likely resort to
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criminal
ways out.
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IELTS essay Several people assert that the main cause of crime is an economically disadvantaged background. However, others say that crime is caused by a person's nature.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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