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Rich countries should not hire services of doctors, engineers and other experts from poor countries. Do you agree or disagree?

Rich countries should not hire services of doctors, engineers and other experts from poor countries. BJgKX
It is evident a fact that many western countries are developed rigorously by enhancing the migration of the people from the underdeveloped nations. It is an alarming debate that whether wealthy nations should not allow the highly skilled people like engineers, doctors and teachers from the deprived regions. As per my viewpoint, I disagree as rich and poor nations are benefited and can cope up with the primary issues as poverty and unemployment. To commence with, many developing and poor countries face innumerable issues which hinder their overall growth to thrive at required pace with the changing time. Rich countries should come forward to cope with the amount of poverty the world is facing in the contemporary time. Similarly, those wealthy regions can support those nations by signing mutual agreements and cooperation in terms of economic and adequate infrastructure development. Secondly, many large organizations of affluent nations allow individuals who are highly skilled and knowledgeable to work in their companies. They should do the selection of such employees on the basis of required skills, abilities, knowledge and experience. Moreover, it gives people a chance from deprived regions to learn new aspects and can support their families through the earned income and can cope with the financial situation in their home regions. For instance, many scientists and engineers from Asian regions like India and China are employed by foreign companies which are located in the American and European region and it could become advantageous to flourish dramatically as compared to other nations. Thus, other countries also follow this trend. Furthermore, according to the recent study by Forbes magazine, that highly technological jobs are most lead by engineers, doctors and scientists who belong from India. In addition, many superior designated jobs like CEO and Managing director are also led by many Indian people. For instance, 65% of tech-savvy jobs in many multinational organizations are led by qualified Indian people in many wealthy countries. Hence, those rich regions are benefited a lot and that enhanced the overall economic development by such contribution of people from poor areas. In conclusion, affluent countries should support the people of deprived regions by employing jobs on the basis of their skills and abilities, so that it can help to cope up the poverty and unemployment issues in the poor nations.
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are developed
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by enhancing the migration of the
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people
from the underdeveloped
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. It is an alarming debate that whether wealthy
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nations
should not
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allow
the
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skilled
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people
like engineers, doctors and teachers from the deprived
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regions
. As per my viewpoint, I disagree as rich and
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poor
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nations
are benefited
and can
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cope
up with the primary issues as poverty and unemployment.

To commence with,
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many
developing and
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poor
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countries
face innumerable issues which hinder their
overall
growth to thrive at required pace with the changing time. Rich
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countries
should
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come
forward to
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cope
with the amount of poverty the world is facing in the contemporary time.
Similarly
, those wealthy
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regions
can support those
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nations
by signing mutual agreements and cooperation in terms of economic and adequate infrastructure development.
Secondly
,
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many
large organizations of affluent
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nations
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allow
individuals who are
highly
skilled and knowledgeable to work in their
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companies
. They should do the selection of such employees on the basis of required
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skills
, abilities, knowledge and experience.
Moreover
, it gives
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people
a chance from deprived
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regions
to learn new aspects and can support their families through the earned income and can
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cope
with the financial situation in their home
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regions
.
For instance
,
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many
scientists and engineers from Asian
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regions
like India and China
are employed
by foreign
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companies
which
are located
in the American and European
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region
and it could become advantageous to flourish
dramatically
as compared to other
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nations
.
Thus
, other
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countries
also
follow this trend.

Furthermore
, according to the recent study by Forbes magazine, that
highly
technological
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jobs
are most lead by engineers, doctors and scientists who belong from India.
In addition
,
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many
superior designated
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jobs
like CEO and Managing director are
also
led by
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many
Indian
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people
.
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, 65% of tech-savvy
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jobs
in
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multinational organizations
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by qualified Indian
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in
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wealthy
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countries
.
Hence
, those rich
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regions
are benefited
a lot and that enhanced the
overall
economic development by such contribution of
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people
from
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poor
areas.

In conclusion
, affluent
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countries
should support the
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people
of deprived
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regions
by employing
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jobs
on the basis of their
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skills
and abilities,
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so
that it can
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help
to
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cope
up the poverty and unemployment issues in the
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poor
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nations
.
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IELTS essay Rich countries should not hire services of doctors, engineers and other experts from poor countries.

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