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Reducing Traffic and Pollution Problems by Increasing the Price of Petrol

Reducing Traffic and Pollution Problems by Increasing the Price of Petrol lLr91
In this day and age, the growing population in the metropolitan cities and the sub-urban areas requires more frequent access to the transportation for moving from one place to another, which results in a massive growth of traffic and pollution. Increasing the price of petrol can never be an effective solution to minimize the growing traffic and pollution problems in our day to day life because the mass people will be a victim of the price hike of petrol one way or another. The transportation companies may or may not decrease the number of vehicles in the streets but the ongoing demand of the vehicles will not decrease. People will face trouble during peak hours to find transportation to reach their destination. Instead of increasing the price of petrol, other measures can be taken to solve the traffic and pollution problems. First of all, the decentralization can be implemented to decrease the population in a certain area so that less people will be living in a place and less transportation will be required. Secondly, people can be encouraged to work from home if possible. Thirdly, the government can provide incentive on ecofriendly transportation systems so that big companies and mass people will feel good using electronic vehicles. Last but not the least, the government and non-government agencies can work together to create awareness among mass people. In conclusion, due to the increase of population, the need for transportation is also increasing every day. However, the necessary steps should be taken as early as possible to minimize the damage and eventually, solve the traffic congestion and pollution problems
In this day and age, the growing population in the metropolitan cities and the sub-urban areas requires more frequent access to the
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transportation
for moving from one place to another, which results in a massive growth of
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traffic
and pollution.

Increasing the price of petrol can never be an effective solution to minimize the growing
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traffic
and pollution problems in our
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day to day
life
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because
the mass
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people
will be a victim of the price hike of petrol one way or another. The
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transportation
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companies
may or may not decrease the number of vehicles in the streets
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but
the ongoing demand of the vehicles will not decrease.
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People
will face trouble during peak hours to find
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transportation
to reach their destination.

Instead
of increasing the price of petrol, other measures can
be taken
to solve the
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traffic
and pollution problems.
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First of all
, the decentralization can
be implemented
to decrease the population in a certain area
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so
that
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less
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people
will be living in a place and less
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transportation
will
be required
.
Secondly
,
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people
can
be encouraged
to work from home if possible.
Thirdly
, the
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government
can provide incentive on
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ecofriendly
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transportation
systems
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so
that
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big
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companies
and mass
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people
will feel
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good
using electronic vehicles. Last
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but
not the least, the
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government
and non-
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government
agencies can work together to create awareness among mass
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people
.

In conclusion
, due to the increase of population, the need for
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transportation
is
also
increasing every day.
However
, the necessary steps should
be taken
as early as possible to minimize the damage and
eventually
, solve the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
congestion and pollution problems
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IELTS essay Reducing Traffic and Pollution Problems by Increasing the Price of Petrol

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
5.5
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