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Recently, a multiple government has fixed the age of retiring at 65 years old.

Recently, a multiple government has fixed the age of retiring at 65 years old. Neither the employee works as a bricklayer or as an accountant. However, This crucial decision is a hotly debated topic that often divides opinion. In my point of view, there are several workers deed to stop working at the age of 65 years, or even less, due to the hard work they do and the critical tasks in their everyday duty. On the one hand, a plethora of jobs require a huge physical efforts to establish
Recently, a multiple
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government
has
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fixed
the age of retiring at 65 years
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old
. Neither the employee works as a bricklayer
Use “nor” with neither.
or
as an accountant.
However
, This crucial decision is a
hotly
debated topic that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
divides opinion. In my point of view, there are several workers deed to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
working at the age of 65 years, or even less, due to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
work they do and the critical tasks in their everyday duty. On the one hand, a plethora of jobs require
The plural noun “efforts” cannot be used with the article “a”. Did you mean “a huge physical effort” or “huge physical efforts”?
a huge physical efforts
to
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph.
establish

IELTS essay Recently, a multiple government has fixed the age of retiring at 65 years old.

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  American English
1 paragraphs
89 words
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4.0
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