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Q. In Britain, lots of old people spend the later years of their lives in a home with other old people. There are nurses to take care in these houses. It has been observed that the Government of various nations including Britain, pay for this care. To what extent, do you think this is right? Support your answer with reasons. Share example with the help of your knowledge or experience.

Q. In Britain, lots of old people spend the later years of their lives in a home with other old people. There are nurses to take care in these houses. It has been observed that the Government of various nations including Britain, pay for this care. Support your answer with reasons. Share example with the help of your knowledge or experience. mLLWL
Ageing is the law of nature. Human bodies undergo numerous changes with the passage of time. It is the responsibility of near and dear ones, as well as the Government authorities to look after the oldies. According to the studies, the mortality rate has shown a significant decline after the advancement in medical services and its positive effects on the living beings. On the contrary, lots of people have developed a bend of mind to spend the later years of their lives in a separate home with other old people. These houses are assumed to have been equipped with medical aids and facilities, including nurses to look after the aged. It has been observed in many cases that the Government of various nations including Britain, pay for this care. However, it accounts equal duty of the family to bare the living and care expenses of their own family members in their later years. There could be many reasons for this including few listed below. Firstly, it keeps you connected with the family irrespective of distances. Secondly, individuals feel secure and planned for later old years. Researchers have listed in many publications that personalized care, supervision and medication keeps oldies happy and healthy. Thereby, they live longer than expected. For example, in Japan, families eat together, stay connected and love to spend their last moments of life with their closed ones. However, with nuclear families becoming common, it could become problematic to balance the expenditure. Hence, in my opinion if this responsibility gets shared between the Government and family members, it may lead to a better place with peace and serenity in life. It would be praiseworthy to not only spend lavishly on own lifestyle but also to give comparable time, love and support to our dear ones, particularly aged members. Life would be phenomenal on mother Earth with this vision of optimism.
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changes
with the passage of time. It is the responsibility of near and dear
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ones
,
as well
as the
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Government
authorities to look after the oldies. According to the studies, the mortality rate has shown a significant decline after the advancement in medical services and its
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positive
effects on the living beings.
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, lots of
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people
have developed a bend of mind to spend the later years of their
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lives
in a separate home with other
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old
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. These
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houses
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with medical aids and facilities, including nurses to look after the aged.

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been observed
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cases that the
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Government
of various nations including Britain, pay for this care.
However
, it accounts equal duty of the
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family
to bare the living and care expenses of their
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own
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family
members in their later years. There could be
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many
reasons for this including few listed below.
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, it
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keeps
you connected with the
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family
irrespective of distances.
Secondly
, individuals feel secure and planned for later
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old
years.

Researchers have listed in
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many
publications that personalized care, supervision and medication
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keeps
oldies happy and healthy. Thereby, they
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live
longer than
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expected
.
For example
, in Japan,
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eat together, stay connected and
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love
to spend their last moments of life with their closed
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ones
.
However
, with nuclear
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families
becoming common, it could become problematic to balance the expenditure.

Hence
, in my opinion if this responsibility
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gets
shared between the
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Government
and
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family
members, it may lead to a better place with peace and serenity in life. It would be praiseworthy to not
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only
spend
lavishly
on
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own
lifestyle
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also
to give comparable time,
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love
and support to our dear
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ones
,
particularly
aged members. Life would be phenomenal on mother Earth with this vision of optimism.
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IELTS essay Q. In Britain, lots of old people spend the later years of their lives in a home with other old people. There are nurses to take care in these houses. It has been observed that the Government of various nations including Britain, pay for this care. Support your answer with reasons. Share example with the help of your knowledge or experience.

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