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problem of children mistake behavior

problem of children mistake behavior 70LVY
Misbehaving students at in the school is becoming more severe and happening more frequently. Unfortunately, this will make it more difficult for schools to educate pupils because problematic behaviors are more important in affecting the learning process. Parents nowadays are all concerned with their jobs, and they do not don't have enough time to spend with their children, so they pay little attention to them. As a result, children are unaware of their words and behaviors. In addition, children tend to lack discipline when it comes to incorrect/ improper behavior at school and in society. One of the key sources of the problem is the influence of technology on students. This means that student misbehavior could be impacted by the advancement of smartphones. Using smartphones in class, for example, and being addicted to a specific app, might lead to bad behavior. However/ Fortunately, there are solutions to these problems. One of the ways/ measures to tackle poor students' behaviors is that parents and teachers should be closer to the children as friends and carefully listen to their issues so that the best solutions can be implemented. Furthermore, rather than indulging and neglecting their children, parents should be more strict in training them. A third approach is to control what our children are watching on television, to employ software to block websites with harmful content. To sum up, it is clear that misbehavior of students has become more popular. Nevertheless, the issue can be resolved by teaching students the importance of being wel
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problematic
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behaviors
are more
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important
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enough
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children
,
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they pay
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little
attention to them.
As a result
,
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children
are unaware of their words and
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behaviors
.
In addition
,
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children
tend to lack discipline when it
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comes
to incorrect/ improper
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behavior
at school and in society. One of the key sources of the problem is the influence of technology on
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students
. This means that
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student
misbehavior could
be impacted
by the advancement of smartphones. Using smartphones in
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class
,
for example
, and
being addicted
to a specific app, might lead to
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bad
behavior.

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However
/
Fortunately
, there are solutions to these problems. One of the ways/ measures to tackle poor students'
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behaviors
is that parents and teachers should be closer to the
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children
as friends and
carefully
listen to their issues
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so
that the best solutions can
be implemented
.
Furthermore
,
rather
than indulging and neglecting their
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children
, parents should be more strict in training them. A third approach is to control what our
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children
are watching on television, to employ software to block websites with harmful content.

To sum up, it is
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clear
that misbehavior of
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students
has become more popular.
Nevertheless
, the issue can
be resolved
by teaching
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students
the importance of being
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IELTS essay problem of children mistake behavior

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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