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Prison is the common way in most countries to try to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with a better education. Do you agree or disagree?

Prison is the common way in most countries to try to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with a better education. RNyWQ
Majority of the countries deem to resolve the criminal issues by granting imprisonment to the culprits which is a conventional way, while providing enhanced education to the people is more beneficial remedy. I do agree with the statement and will decipher my views for the same in the following paragraphs. To elucidate, prison can be a way of punishment for illegal practices but it is not an assurance for the crime-free society, because most of the criminals again indulge themselves into far bigger inhuman activities as soon as they receive a bail from their cells. Moreover, many of them are often uneducated and due to deficit of appropriate academic guidance they do not find themselves able enough to differentiate between right or wrong deeds. For instance, a study performed in Norway in 2007 suggests that 90% of the criminals in the city are illiterates. Hence, availing quality education is only a option to train the human minds into positive direction and aids in being a top-notch member of the community. Further, education is always a superior way of making a world a better place to live for a reason that it is a dynamic process as one knowledged individual can bring knowledge to the whole surrounding. In addition to this, apart from being educated literacy makes you to understand and being known about all the legal laws and procedures which are in practice for the people who are found guilty. Therefore, transforming the mindset of a person into humanitarian way can only be achieved by making them educated so that they know what they should do in order to be a sophisticated citizen rather than being a man who is detrimental for others. To summarise, imprisonment can be a solution to crimes but an educated world can play a far greater role in promoting positivity and tranquility amongst the individuals and will be a global resolution for the criminal activities happening world-wide because it fosters humanity and literacy.
Majority of the countries deem to resolve the
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issues by granting imprisonment to the culprits which is a conventional way, while providing enhanced education to the
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people
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more beneficial remedy. I do
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agree
with the statement and will decipher my views for the same in the following paragraphs. To elucidate, prison can be a way of punishment for illegal practices
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but
it is not an assurance for the crime-free society,
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because
most of the
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criminals
again indulge themselves into far bigger inhuman activities as
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soon
as they receive a bail from their cells.
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,
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many
of them are
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often
uneducated and due to deficit of appropriate academic guidance they do not find themselves able
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enough
to differentiate between right or
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wrong
deeds.
For instance
, a study performed in Norway in 2007 suggests that 90% of the
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criminals
in the city are illiterates.
Hence
, availing quality education is
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only
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a
option to train the human minds into
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positive
direction and aids in being a top-notch member of the community.
Further
, education is always a superior way of making a world a better place to
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live
for a reason that it is a dynamic process as one
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individual can bring knowledge to the whole surrounding.
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to this, apart from
being educated
literacy
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makes
you to understand and
being known
about all the legal laws and procedures which are in practice for the
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people
who
are found
guilty.
Therefore
, transforming the mindset of a person into humanitarian way can
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only
be achieved
by making them educated
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so
that they know what they should do in order to be a sophisticated citizen
rather
than being a
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man
who is detrimental for others. To
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summarise
, imprisonment can be a solution to crimes
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but
an educated world can play a far greater role in promoting positivity and tranquility amongst the individuals and will be a global resolution for the
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criminal
activities happening world-wide
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because
it fosters humanity and literacy.
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IELTS essay Prison is the common way in most countries to try to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with a better education.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
328 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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