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Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime.however,a more affective solution is to provide people a better education. Agree or disagree?

In this modern era, offence is the most increasing problem in every nation. In several nations, prison is the simplest solution for punishing prisoner while others opine that giving better education to people is a more wise cognitive solution. i partially agree with this statement and my classification is justified in the ensuing paragraphs. To initiate with, countries giving punishment for jail is the most common. Nowadays, the culprits do several types of crime: killing, extortion, theft, kidnapping and rape. For this, higher authorities make a laws for offenders. So, they go to the jail for doing violent crimes. Due to this, suspects get justice and people believe on government's law. Also, if any country 's ruling party do not solve problem and not give punishment of jail, the culprits will do more crime and not maintain peace in the nation. So, giving punishment to jail is necessary for every globe. For instance, one media survey says that, 90% people do not create any nusence as well as crime scene because of prison punishment. On the contrary, providing education is also one major part for stopping offence at one point. Today's generation is very popular for their education level and development. If teachers and parents deliver a proper knowledge about crime from educational directions, students do not commit any crime in future. they focus on their study and aim. Education provides them ethics, ability, skills and so on. Due to this, they may not create any offence for money and only focus on their job and study. To sum up, crime is not only solve by punishment of prison but also get disappear through education at some point. But prison is necessary for the culprits who do big crime in nation
In this modern era,
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offence
is the most increasing problem in every
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nation
. In several
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nations
,
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prison
is the simplest solution for punishing prisoner while others opine that giving better
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education
to
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people
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is
a more wise cognitive solution.
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i
partially
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agree
with this statement and my classification
is justified
in the ensuing paragraphs. To initiate with, countries giving
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punishment
for
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jail
is the most common. Nowadays, the culprits do several types of
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crime
: killing, extortion, theft, kidnapping and rape. For this, higher authorities
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make
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a laws
for offenders.
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So
, they go to the
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jail
for doing violent
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crimes
. Due to this, suspects
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get
justice and
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people
believe on
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government
's law.
Also
, if any
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country 's
ruling party do not solve problem and not give
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punishment
of
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jail
, the culprits will do more
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crime
and not maintain peace in the
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nation
.
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So
, giving
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punishment
to
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jail
is necessary for every globe.
For instance
, one media survey says that, 90%
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people
do not create any
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nusence
as well
as
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crime
scene
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because
of
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prison
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punishment
.
On the contrary
, providing
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education
is
also
one major part for stopping
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offence
at one point.
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Today
's generation is
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very
popular for their
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education
level and development. If teachers and parents deliver a proper knowledge about
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crime
from educational directions, students do not commit any
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crime
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in future
.
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they
focus on their study and aim.
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Education
provides them ethics, ability,
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skills
and
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so
on. Due to this, they may not create any
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offence
for money and
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only
focus on their job and study. To sum up,
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crime
is not
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only
solve by
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punishment
of
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prison
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but
also
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get
disappear through
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education
at
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some
point.
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prison
is necessary for the culprits who do
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big
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crime
in
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nation
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IELTS essay Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. however, a more affective solution is to provide people a better education. Agree or disagree?

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