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On the proliferation of private cars on the roads in many parts of the world leading to serious problems of pollution and contributing to global warming…Some people think that governments should spend money for the development of public transportation systems in order to alleviate this problem. Others think it is better to spend money for the development of electric and other types of cars that may cause less pollution.

Pollution a small word yet a big dilemma which the modern world is facing. There are various types of pollution like noise pollution, air pollution, water pollution etc. Each one on its own is like a malignant disease which is spreading and destroying everything on its way. Lets take air pollution for instance, it is the leading cause of global warming which itself has many disastrous effects. There are many causes of pollution like with the increase of population there is also increase in the usage of private cars which is causing a lot of air pollution. To limit private cars two solutions are being proposed. One school of thought is that the use of public transportation instead of private cars would decrease the number of cars and thus the pollution. This includes large buses and trains etc that could accommodate large masses of people. The other group believing in modern technology thinks the use of pollution free cars such as electric cars is the key solution to this problem. The engineers are working really hard to develop pollution free cars and this area of technology is progressing day by day. So some people think that the government should invest in this field to decrease the problem of pollution. I would support the first group and would consider public transport a better option. The reason being it would cost less so it would put less burden on the financial resources of the country and similarly at the consumer end it would be economical for the poor people of the country. Electric cars may seems to be a fancy and dreamy option but it is not possible for the majority of the developing countries to invest a great amount of money in this field where children are dying of hunger. In short the rising pollution is the sole reason for many diseases and the drastic climate changes we are seeing nowadays so this problem cannot be overlooked. Measures have to be taken on large scale to alleviate this problem.
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dilemma which the modern world is facing. There are various types of
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pollution
like noise
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pollution
, air
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pollution
, water
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pollution
etc. Each one on its
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is like a malignant disease which is spreading and destroying everything on its way.

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Lets
take air
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pollution
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disastrous effects. There are
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causes of
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pollution
like with the increase of population there is
also
increase in the usage of private
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cars
which is causing
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a lot of
air
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pollution
. To limit private
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two solutions are
being proposed
.

One school of
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is that the
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of public transportation
instead
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cars
would decrease the number of
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thus
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. This includes large buses and trains etc that could accommodate large masses of
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.

The other group believing in modern technology
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such as electric
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is the key solution to this
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problem
. The engineers are working
really
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free
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and this area of technology is progressing day by day.
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government
should invest in this field to decrease the
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of
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pollution
. I would support the
first
group and would consider public transport a better option.

The reason being it would cost less
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it would put less burden on the financial resources of the country and
similarly
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it would be economical for the poor
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Electric
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seems
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it is not possible for the majority of the
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developing countries
to invest a great amount of money in this field where children are dying of hunger.

In short the rising
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pollution
is the sole reason for
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many
diseases and the drastic climate
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we are seeing
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nowadays
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this
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cannot
be overlooked
. Measures
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have to
be taken
on large scale to alleviate this
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problem
.
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IELTS essay On the proliferation of private cars on the roads in many parts of the world leading to serious problems of pollution and contributing to global warming…Some people think that governments should spend money for the development of public transportation systems in order to alleviate this problem. Others think it is better to spend money for the development of electric and other types of cars that may cause less pollution.

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
338 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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