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Prevention is better than cure. To what extent do you agree?

Prevention is better than cure. To what extent do you agree? Wqpo0
It is stipulated that figuring out the mechanisms of a particular disease and subsequently finding out the cure for it is a lot more expensive than simply finding out ways to ensure it does not affect people at all. I agree with this statement as investing in preventative measures is not time-sensitive, is cost-effective and allows for a constantly healthy population. Researching a disease after it affects the population results in researchers being put into a time constraint to figure out solutions to the illnesses. When a disease strikes and adversely affects a large section of the population, disease specialists rush to put together a solution. This is to limit the spread of the disease and minimize the effect it has on the population. The issue with doing so is that, it might lead to vaccines or medications being produced that are approved by regulatory bodies and it costs substantially more to figure out a solution as larger teams are required to figure out solutions rapidly. For example when the COVID-19 pandemic hit the world, it spread fast. It affected a large portion of the globe and it was hard to keep under control. Drug manufacturers such as Pfizer and Oxford rushed to create vaccines, which was issued to the public without rigorous testing and FDA approval. Investing in preventative measures results in a population that is not affected and functions normally. If we rid the problem before it affects us, we no longer have to deal with the problem; we no longer have to suffer from the disease. The effects of preventative measures are minimal. They tend to cause a flu or rash which leads to a patient being sick for a maximum of a few days whereas if the person is afflicted with the disease itself, it is more than likely the patient will have to spend a long time in hospital which leads to more suffering and care usually costs more. The vaccine for tuberculosis is a great example of this. Most people are issued this vaccine when they are newborns. This vaccine does tend to cause the child to get a fever and develop sores, however that outweighs the pain, suffering and in some cases fatality that tuberculosis might cause. In conclusion, preventative measures are not only cost effective for companies and governments; it is also much easier on a person. The ill-effects of a vaccine is nowhere near the suffering caused by the disease itself which is why I completely agree that prevention is better than cure.
It
is stipulated
that figuring out the mechanisms of a particular
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disease
and
subsequently
finding out the cure for it is a lot more expensive than
simply
finding out ways to ensure it does not
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affect
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people
at all. I
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agree
with this statement as investing in preventative
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measures
is not time-sensitive,
is cost
-effective and
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allows
for a
constantly
healthy population.

Researching a
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disease
after it
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affects
the
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population
results in researchers
being put
into a time constraint to figure out
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solutions
to the illnesses. When a
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disease
strikes and
adversely
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affects
a large section of the
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population
,
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disease
specialists rush to put together a
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solution
. This is to limit the spread of the
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disease
and minimize the effect it has on the
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population
. The issue with doing
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so
is that, it might lead to
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vaccines
or medications
being produced
that
are approved
by regulatory bodies and it costs
substantially
more to figure out a
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solution
as larger teams
are required
to figure out
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solutions
rapidly
.
For example
when the COVID-19 pandemic hit the world, it spread
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fast
. It
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affected
a large portion of the globe and it was
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hard
to
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keep
under control. Drug manufacturers such as Pfizer and Oxford rushed to create
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vaccines
, which
was issued
to the public without rigorous testing and FDA approval.

Investing in preventative
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measures
results in a
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population
that is
not
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affected
and functions
normally
. If we rid the problem
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before
it
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affects
us, we no longer
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have to
deal with the problem; we no longer
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have to
suffer from the
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disease
. The effects of preventative
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measures
are minimal. They tend to cause a flu or rash which leads to a patient being sick for a maximum of a few days whereas if the person
is afflicted
with the
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disease
itself, it is more than likely the patient will
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
spend a long time in hospital which leads to more suffering and care
usually
costs more. The
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vaccine
for tuberculosis is a great example of this. Most
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people
are issued
this
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vaccine
when they are newborns. This
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vaccine
does tend to cause the child to
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get
a fever and develop sores,
however
that outweighs the pain, suffering and in
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some
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cases
fatality that tuberculosis might cause.

In conclusion
, preventative
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measures
are not
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only
cost effective for
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companies
and
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governments
; it is
also
much easier on a person. The ill-effects of a
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vaccine
is nowhere near the suffering caused by the
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disease
itself which is why I completely
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agree
that prevention is better than cure.
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IELTS essay Prevention is better than cure. To what extent do you agree?

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