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Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

The concept oh careers nowadays witnesses a major sheft than what it was believed in the past. While it was the norm for an individual to have a single job and be just fine with it, modern people, however, aspire to work in more than one occupation and to further educate themselves in more than one aspects of life. I personally side with the later as I believe nowadays needs to establish a financially stable live require us to possess different skills. Firstly, majority of us would need more than one source of income. Where life responsabilties are getting more demanding then ever, to the extend that many of us cannot afford the expenses of it. For instance, the significant increase of home rents compared to the past, schools fee and the basic life requirment such as electricity and water, in addition to new tools of communication bills like phone and internet. All of that make it hard for the people to depend only to one job and must consider having more than one to compete in current life. Secondly. the life is becoming extremely competetive recently. The more skills that a person has the better opportunitis come on his way. With that being known, further and continues education sets to be inevitable in modern life, either by seeking higher education or self-improving a certain skill in one of the trendy oriantations, such as photo or vedio editing and graphic designing. To conclude, the demands of life got changed from what was accepted among the preceding generation. The trend of having more than one job is rising, and the need for further education is dispensable.
The concept oh careers nowadays witnesses a major
sheft
than what it
was believed
in the past. While it was the norm for an individual to have a single job and be
just
fine with it, modern
people
,
however
, aspire to work in more than one occupation and to
further
educate themselves in more than
one aspects
of
life
. I
personally
side with the
later
as I believe nowadays needs to establish a
financially
stable
live
require us to possess
different
skills
.

Firstly
,
majority of
us would need more than one source of income. Where
life
responsabilties
are getting more demanding
then
ever, to the
extend
that
many
of us cannot afford the expenses of it.
For instance
, the significant increase of home rents compared to the past, schools fee and the basic
life
requirment
such as electricity and water,
in addition
to new tools of communication bills like phone and internet. All of that
make
it
hard
for the
people
to
depend
only
to one job and
must
consider having more than one to compete in
current
life.

Secondly
.
the
life
is becoming
extremely
competetive
recently. The more
skills
that a person has the better
opportunitis
come
on his way. With that
being known
,
further
and continues education sets to be inevitable in modern
life
, either by seeking higher education or self-improving a certain
skill
in one of the trendy
oriantations
, such as photo or
vedio
editing and graphic designing.

To conclude
, the demands of
life
got
changed
from what was
accepted
among the preceding generation. The trend of having more than one job is rising, and the need for
further
education is dispensable.
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IELTS essay Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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