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Possibilities of living on Mars

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The reading and the lecture are about Mars and the possibility of life on it. The author of the reading feels that Mars is the best option after Earth for the people to live and mentions his reasons. However, the lecturer challenges all the points made by the author and those can be explored in the subsequent paragraphs. First of all, the professor implies that analysis from the Mars Express Mission does not prove the presence of liquid water on Mars. Moreover, the problem with the analysis is that it is based on a comparison between Mars and the Earth's atmosphere. He also adds the point that Mars is not geologically active to make comparison with the Earth. Even more, The temperature on Mars is -70 degrees celsius, which indicates it is far too cold for the liquid water to maintain. And also, the waves can be from the other source of elements. On the other hand, the reading states that the Mission sent electromagnetic waves to analyze the presence of water on the Martian surface. Secondly, the writer posits that the discovery of microbes in the harsh environment of Mars makes it favorable for the people to live, as the Mars environment coincides with present Antarctica. On the contrary, the tutor argues that the Martian atmosphere is too harsh for the human being to live as the human body conditions are too weak to endure the harsh climate. The climate of Mars is extreme with temperatures ranging between -87 to -5 degrees celsius. Furthermore, the human can either burn or freeze to death at these temperatures on Mars. Finally, the academician provides that Curiosity rover is not preferably reliable and it has shown cases of malfunction. Additionally, Europe has worked on the prediction of methane gas on the planet Mars, but The ESA in 2016 managed to observe the whole surface of Mars and found no traces methane. This shows us no possibility of life on Mars. This point contradicts the point made in the reading. The reading shows that Curiosity rover has detected traces of methane gas on Mars and it has increased even more in the cascade of years.
The
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reading
and the lecture are about
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Mars
and the possibility of life on it. The author of the
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reading
feels that
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Mars
is the best option after Earth for the
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people
to
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live
and mentions his reasons.
However
, the lecturer challenges all the
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points
made by the author and those can
be explored
in the subsequent paragraphs.

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First of all
, the professor implies that analysis from the
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Mars
Express Mission does not prove the presence of liquid water on
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Mars
.
Moreover
, the problem with the analysis is that it
is based
on a comparison between
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Mars
and the Earth's atmosphere. He
also
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adds
the
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point
that
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Mars
is not
geologically
active to
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make
comparison with the Earth. Even more, The temperature on
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Mars
is -70 degrees
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celsius
, which indicates it is far too
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cold
for the liquid water to maintain. And
also
, the waves can be from the other source of elements.
On the other hand
, the
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reading
states that the Mission
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sent
electromagnetic waves to analyze the presence of water on the Martian surface.

Secondly
, the writer posits that the discovery of microbes in the harsh environment of
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Mars
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makes
it favorable for the
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people
to
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live
, as the
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Mars
environment coincides with present Antarctica.
On the contrary
, the tutor argues that the Martian atmosphere is too harsh for the human being to
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live
as the human body conditions are too weak to endure the harsh climate. The climate of
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Mars
is extreme with temperatures ranging between -87 to -5 degrees
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celsius
.
Furthermore
, the human can either burn or freeze to death at these temperatures on Mars.

Finally
, the academician provides that Curiosity rover is not
preferably
reliable and it has shown cases of malfunction.
Additionally
, Europe has worked on the prediction of methane gas on the planet
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Mars
,
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but
The ESA in 2016 managed to observe the whole surface of
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Mars
and found no
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traces
methane. This
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shows
us no possibility of life on
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Mars
. This
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point
contradicts the
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point
made in the
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reading
. The
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reading
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shows
that Curiosity rover has detected traces of methane gas on
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Mars
and it has increased even more in the cascade of years.
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IELTS essay Possibilities of living on Mars

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
362 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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