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Integrated essay about Buzzing in advertisement

Integrated essay about Buzzing in advertisement 9LGB7
It goes without saying that attracting more consumers through different advertisements is a controversial issue among the producers. One of the latest method is called " buzzing" . In this method buzzers try to sell products to someone they know or meet. The reading mention three negative effects of buzzing, whereas the lecturer brings some arguments to reject it. The first point which is mentioned in the reading is that the information which is presented by buzzer aren't reliable because they are getting paid for what they say, on the other hand the speakers refute it by explaining that the producers offer this job to those people who buy a product and use it and think it is good. so what the buzzers say to people actually is a true information. The second point which is illustrated in the reading is that people may not ask a lot of question about the product because they believe whatever buzzers claim, Although the buzzer in the lecture claim that it is not true, because people usually ask a lots of question about the product, for instance price, quality of services and how long he use that product. The last point which is explained in the reading is that this method extend a mistrust and dishonesty in the society because of representing exaggerate information to convince people, in spite the fact that speakers reject it because he thinks if someone satisfied to use a product and recommend it to others it brings more trust and good motion in societies.
It goes without saying that attracting more consumers through
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different
advertisements is a controversial issue among the producers. One of the latest
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method
is called
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&quot
;
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buzzing&quot
;
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.
In this method buzzers try to sell
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products
to someone they know or
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meet
. The
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reading
mention three
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negative
effects of buzzing, whereas the lecturer brings
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some
arguments to reject it.

The
first
point which
is mentioned
in the
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reading
is that the information which
is presented
by buzzer aren't reliable
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because
they are getting paid for what they say,
on the other hand
the speakers refute it by explaining that the producers offer this job to those
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people
who
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buy
a
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product
and
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use
it and
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think
it is
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good
.
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so
what the buzzers say to
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people
actually is
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a true information
.

The second point which
is illustrated
in the
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reading
is that
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people
may not ask
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a lot of
question about the
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product
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because
they believe whatever buzzers claim, Although the buzzer in the lecture claim that it is not true,
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because
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people
usually
ask
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a lots
of question about the
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product
,
for instance
price, quality of services and how long he
The pronoun 'he' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "uses", "used".
use
that product.

The last point which is
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explained
in the
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reading
is that this method extend a mistrust and dishonesty in the society
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because
of representing exaggerate information to convince
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people
, in spite the fact that speakers reject it
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because
he
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thinks
if someone satisfied to
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use
a
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product
and recommend it to others it brings more trust and
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good
motion in societies.
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IELTS essay Integrated essay about Buzzing in advertisement

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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