Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

People should pay tax or they should use their money for their personal needs. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

People should pay tax or they should use their money for their personal needs. 2aB2J
Money is peculiar thing that life seems to be centred around. People work hard from dawn to dusk for buying necessities and desirable. Some of the amount should be given to the authorities in turms of tex, is debatable. This essay discusses both the sides and draws a logical conclusion at the end. To start with, beyond the basic needs money helps one to achieve his life’s goals, education, health care, charity and other material goods. A part from this money can lead one or person to have high standard of living and memorable experiences like vacation or holidays, adventures sports and events, with money, one can avoid unnecessary suffering and enjoy comforts as it provides freedom and financial support. Hence, money management is crucial. On the other side of the issue, government needs money for various reasons, firstly, to re destribute funded money in the competition of natural calamities, grants, scholarship, interest free loans and subsides to pay salaries to government staff such as police, teachers, doctors and others who are surving as a national security force. Additionally money in the form of tax can be utilised in supporting the sector of education, research, health care and infrastructure project like railways, flyover, under bridges and soon. Lastly this money helps in making the economy of the country stable and throve taxes the government can pay of its debts. An analysis of the topic shows that the taxes people pay come back to them inform of development and services. Hence-one should support the regularity body by paying tax for not only the nation’s growth but also for they individuals growth.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Money
is peculiar thing that life seems to be
Possible spelling mistake. 'centred' is British English.
centred
around.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
People
work
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
from dawn to dusk for buying necessities and desirable.
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
Some of the
amount should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
to the authorities in
Possible spelling mistake found.
turms
of
Possible spelling mistake found.
tex
, is debatable. This essay discusses both the sides and draws a logical conclusion at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
with, beyond the basic needs
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
one to achieve his life’s goals, education, health care, charity and other material
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
. A part from this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
can lead one or person to have high standard of living and memorable experiences like vacation or holidays, adventures sports and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
, with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
, one can avoid unnecessary suffering and enjoy comforts as it provides freedom and financial support.
Hence
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
management is crucial. On the other side of the issue,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
needs
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
for various reasons,
firstly
, to re
Possible spelling mistake found.
destribute
funded
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
in the competition of natural calamities, grants, scholarship, interest free loans and subsides to pay salaries to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
staff such as police, teachers, doctors
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
and others
who are
Possible spelling mistake found.
surving
as a national security force.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Additionally
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
in the form of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tax
can be
Possible spelling mistake. 'utilised' is British English.
utilised
in supporting the sector of education, research, health care and infrastructure project like railways, flyover, under bridges and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.
Lastly
this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
in making the economy of the country stable and
Possible spelling mistake found.
throve
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
taxes
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can pay of its debts. An analysis of the topic
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
taxes
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
pay
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
back to them inform of development and services.
Hence
-one should support the regularity body by paying
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tax
for not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
the nation’s growth
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
for
Do not use a noun immediately after the pronoun 'they'. Use a verb or an adverb, or possibly some other part of speech.
they individuals
growth.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay People should pay tax or they should use their money for their personal needs.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
270 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts