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note about your patient who have an accident

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Name of patient: Jonh. Next two days He will be 18 years old. He lives at 137 PVD st district 9. He has just eaten a hard cookied, and then he realises that his mandibular first incisor is cracked. He feels too bad. Next week, he will back to school so he wants to be treated now. His mother will take him nearly 30 minutes to our clinic. The doctor recomments he should keep his tooth clean, and wash his mount with mouthwash. And the doctor suggest that he should fills it with composite material.
Name of patient:
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Jonh
.
Next
two days He will be 18 years
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old
. He
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lives
at 137 PVD st district 9. He has
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just
eaten a
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hard
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cookied
, and then he
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realises
that his mandibular
first
incisor
is cracked
.
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He
feels too
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bad
.
Next
week, he will back to school
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so
he wants to
be treated
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
. His mother will take him
nearly
30 minutes to our clinic. The doctor
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recomments
he should
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keep
his tooth clean, and wash his mount with mouthwash. And the doctor suggest that he should
The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: "fill"
fills
it with composite material.
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IELTS essay note about your patient who have an accident

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
95 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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