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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People in today’s world have become too dependent on automobiles. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Compared to the previous generation, nowadays the popularity of automobiles is huge. As People can afford to buy them easily, people tend to rely on them too much. However, some people consider that the use of automobiles is appropriate. This essay will give reasons why I agree that automobiles’ use is excessive by focusing on lifestyle. When it comes to the lifestyle of people in today’s world, they are likely to choose convenience and comfort. Since the public transport could not lead them directly to their destination, they decided to use automobiles. Besides it’s convenience, using Automobiles waste less energy or none. For instance, if people need to commute near their places, they will prefer using automobiles to walking. Moreover, using their automobiles is comfortable. People can do whatever they want such as singing, eating some snacks and so on. Some people These all lead to the use of automobiles. Not only lifestyle but also material values causing dependent on cars. Some people tend to believe that one having automobiles is wealthier than the one who do not have one. As a consequence, most people tend to buy and use automobiles for their better material values rather than using they for transportation. As many people are materialistic, automobiles are excessively use to show their wealth. This causes an excessive use of automobiles. In conclusion, I agree with the following statement that people are too independent on their automobiles as they using them as their material values rather for their usage which is transportation.
Compared to the previous generation, nowadays the popularity of
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automobiles
is huge. As
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can afford to
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buy
them
easily
,
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people
tend to rely on them too much.
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,
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some
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people
consider that the
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use
of
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automobiles
is appropriate. This essay will give reasons why I
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agree
that
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automobiles’
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use
is excessive by focusing on lifestyle.

When it
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to the lifestyle of
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people
in
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today
’s world, they are likely to choose convenience and comfort. Since the public transport could not lead them
directly
to their destination, they decided to
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use
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automobiles
.
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it’s
convenience, using
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Automobiles
waste less energy or none.
For instance
, if
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people
need to commute near their places, they will prefer using
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automobiles
to walking.
Moreover
, using their
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automobiles
is comfortable.
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People
can do whatever they want such as singing, eating
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some
snacks and
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so
on.
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Some
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people
These all lead to the
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use
of automobiles.

Not
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only
lifestyle
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also
material values causing dependent on cars.
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Some
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people
tend to believe that one having
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automobiles
is wealthier than the one who do not have one. As a consequence, most
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people
tend to
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buy
and
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use
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automobiles
for their better material values
rather
than using they for transportation. As
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many
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people
are materialistic,
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automobiles
are
excessively
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use to
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show
their wealth. This causes an excessive
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use
of automobiles.

In conclusion
, I
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agree
with the following statement that
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people
are too independent on their
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as
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they using
them as their material values
rather
for their usage which is transportation.
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IELTS essay People in today’s world have become too dependent on automobiles. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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