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"PEOPLE CELEBRATE OCCASIONS SUCH AS "INDEPENDENCE DAY" AND "MOTHER'S DAY". DO YOU THINK IT IS IMPORTANT? WHAT ARE THE ADVANTAGES OF CELEBRATING SUCH DAYS?"

"PEOPLE CELEBRATE OCCASIONS SUCH AS "INDEPENDENCE DAY" AND "MOTHER'S DAY". DO YOU THINK IT IS IMPORTANT? WHAT ARE THE ADVANTAGES OF CELEBRATING SUCH DAYS? " L9WMR

CELEBRATIONS, CEREMONIES, AND RITUALS ALL SHAPE THE CULTURE OF A COMMUNITY ON HOW ITS PEOPLE LINK THEIR PAST WITH THEIR PRESENT, WHAT ASSUMPTIONS ARE AT WORK, AND WHAT BEHAVIORS ARE REINFORCED. THE FOLLOWING ESSAY SHALL EXAMINE THE ROLES AS WELL AS THE BENEFITS OF CELEBRATIONS BEFORE A REASONED CONCLUSION CAN BE DRAWN. CELEBRATIONS AND CEREMONIES OCCUPY A PIVOTAL HISTORIC ROLE IN ANY SOCIETY. FIRST OF ALL, THEY SERVE AS MILESTONES BY WHICH TO GAUGE AND EVALUATE HISTORY. FOR INSTANCE, VIETNAM'S NATIONAL DAY MARKS A KEY MILESTONE IN THE COUNTRY'S QUEST FOR INDEPENDENCE THAT USHERED IN A NEW ERA. BY CELEBRATING THIS OCCASION ANNUALLY, PEOPLE CAN REFLECT ON THE PAST TO EXPRESS THEIR GRATITUDE AND ENVISION WHAT MIGHT BE IN THE FUTURE. FURTHERMORE, CELEBRATIONS CAN PROVIDE LIVING EXAMPLES OF THE VALUES OF A COMMUNITY IN ACTION, AND ENCOURAGE PEOPLE TO ACT IN ACCORDANCE WITH THOSE VALUES. AS PEOPLE TEND TO ASSESS THEIR PERFORMANCE NOT ON THE BASIS OF SOME ARBITRARY STANDARD, BUT IN RELATION TO THE PERFORMANCE OF OTHERS, RECOGNIZING INDIVIDUALS CAN PROVIDE THEM WITH MODELS THAT MOTIVATE THEM TO ENGAGE IN SIMILAR BEHAVIOR. EVEN MORE, THEY CAN KINDLE A SENSE OF PURPOSE AND PRIDE IN RECIPIENTS

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CELEBRATIONS
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PEOPLE
 LINK THEIR PAST WITH THEIR PRESENT, WHAT ASSUMPTIONS ARE AT WORK, AND WHAT BEHAVIORS ARE REINFORCED
. THE FOLLOWING ESSAY SHALL EXAMINE THE ROLES AS WELL
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CELEBRATIONS
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BEFORE
 A REASONED CONCLUSION CAN BE DRAWN
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CELEBRATIONS
 AND CEREMONIES OCCUPY A PIVOTAL HISTORIC ROLE IN ANY SOCIETY. This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
FIRST OF ALL
, THEY SERVE AS MILESTONES BY WHICH TO GAUGE AND EVALUATE HISTORY. FOR INSTANCE
, VIETNAM'S NATIONAL DAY MARKS A KEY MILESTONE IN THE COUNTRY'S QUEST FOR INDEPENDENCE THAT USHERED IN A NEW ERA. BY CELEBRATING THIS OCCASION ANNUALLY
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
PEOPLE
 CAN REFLECT ON THE PAST TO EXPRESS THEIR GRATITUDE AND ENVISION WHAT MIGHT BE IN THE FUTURE. FURTHERMORE
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfestivityceremonyobservancefestivaltriumphanniversary
CELEBRATIONS
 CAN PROVIDE LIVING EXAMPLES OF THE VALUES OF A COMMUNITY IN ACTION, AND ENCOURAGE You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
PEOPLE
 TO ACT IN ACCORDANCE WITH THOSE VALUES. AS You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
PEOPLE
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SOME
 ARBITRARY STANDARD, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
BUT
 IN RELATION TO THE PERFORMANCE OF OTHERS, RECOGNIZING INDIVIDUALS CAN PROVIDE THEM WITH MODELS THAT MOTIVATE THEM TO ENGAGE IN SIMILAR BEHAVIOR. EVEN MORE, THEY CAN KINDLE A SENSE OF PURPOSE AND PRIDE IN Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraphRECIPIENTS.RECIPIENTS!RECIPIENTS?RECIPIENTS:RECIPIENTS,RECIPIENTS;
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