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Over the past few decades, international travel has become more affordable and many people now choose overseas holidays. As a result, tourism is becoming a profitable industry in many countries. However, despite the benefits, tourism can also create problems. What are the advantages and disadvantages of tourism?

An increasing number of people are choosing to travel overseas for their holidays. They are taking advantage of cheaper airfares and as a result, many countries are now profiting from tourism. However, tourism can also create some problems. This essay will discuss some of the advantages and disadvantages. One major benefit of tourism is that it can develop an awareness and understanding of other cultures. Tourists can experience a way of life different from their own and when they return home, they often share their knowledge and experiences of these cultures, customs and foods with family and friends. Another advantage of tourism is the income it creates. Large hotels and resorts often employ local people. In addition, small businesses such as cafes and shops sell locally manufactured products such as souvenirs. In this way, the tourist industry can play a major role in providing employment to locals, thus improving a country’s economy. However, the disadvantages of tourism should not be overlooked. One serious risk of international travel is the possibility of spreading dangerous diseases. A foreign tourist who has become infected with a disease may start an epidemic when returning home or travelling to other countries. The HIV virus is one example of a disease that has now become a worldwide epidemic. Another negative aspect of tourism is the increase in the number of locals who steal from tourists. Tourists carrying visible items of value such as cameras, jewellery or cash are particularly at risk and become easy targets. To sum up, tourism clearly has many cultural and economic benefits, yet also brings risks that could threaten health and safety. Despite these risks, I believe that tourism gives people valuable opportunities to learn about different cultures and should therefore be encouraged.
An increasing number of
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people
are choosing to travel overseas for their holidays. They are taking advantage of cheaper airfares and
as a result
,
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many
countries are
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now
profiting from
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tourism
.
However
,
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tourism
can
also
create
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some
problems. This essay will discuss
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some of the
advantages and disadvantages.

One major benefit of
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tourism
is that it can develop an awareness and understanding of other cultures.
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Tourists
can experience a way of life
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different
from their
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own
and when they return home, they
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often
share their knowledge and experiences of these cultures, customs and foods with family and friends.

Another advantage of
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tourism
is the income it creates. Large hotels and resorts
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often
employ local
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people
.
In addition
,
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small
businesses such as
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cafes
and shops sell
locally
manufactured products such as souvenirs. In this way, the
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tourist
industry can play a major role in providing employment to locals,
thus
improving a country’s economy.

However
, the disadvantages of
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tourism
should not
be overlooked
. One serious
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risk
of international travel is the possibility of spreading
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dangerous
diseases. A foreign
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tourist
who has become infected with a disease may
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start
an epidemic when returning home or travelling to other countries. The
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HIV virus
is one example of a disease that has
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now
become a worldwide epidemic.

Another
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negative
aspect of
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tourism
is the increase in the number of locals who steal from
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tourists
.
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Tourists
carrying visible items of value such as cameras,
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jewellery
or cash are
particularly
at
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risk
and become easy targets.

To sum up,
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tourism
clearly
has
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many
cultural and economic benefits,
yet
also
brings
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risks
that could threaten health and safety. Despite these
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risks
, I believe that
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tourism
gives
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people
valuable opportunities to learn about
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different
cultures and should
therefore
be encouraged
.
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IELTS essay Over the past few decades, international travel has become more affordable and many people now choose overseas holidays. As a result, tourism is becoming a profitable industry in many countries. However, despite the benefits, tourism can also create problems. What are the advantages and disadvantages of tourism?

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