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Nowadays, stress-related illnesses are becoming increasing common.What do you think are the causes of this?What solution can you suggest

Nowadays, stress-related illnesses are becoming increasing common. What do you think are the causes of this? What solution can you suggest oRVx3
Nowadays a stress - related illnesses are becoming increasingly common in the modern world, this essay will discuss the main causes and also suggest a solution to these problems. The main problem caused by stress are situated. Recently stress has risen among teenagers, it is about study and future. Many parents want the children to get a successful in the future. Consequently, the parent demands the children to study for hours without stopping under increasing pressure. What’s more the parents do not allow their children to play or explore outside home due to the parents are afraid if their children forget to study and the future will be bleak. As parents, they should not pressure their children to study for hours. As the result they forget to explore other things, because study and playing are a unity that must be balanced, children are not only sitting at home reading books, but they also have to explore the outside world to get more experience however experiences also an important part of the future. On the other hand, as children, we also need to be able to communicate with parents, they can explain that playing is not only about promiscuity but also adds insight or experience which can be used as a lesson In conclusion, the cause of stress depends on how our situation is and how we organize our lives. If we can control life well, the results will be fine too.
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related illnesses are becoming
increasingly
common in the modern world, this essay will discuss the main causes and
also
suggest a solution to these problems.

The main problem caused by
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stress
are situated
. Recently
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stress
has risen among
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teenagers
, it is about
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study
and
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future
.
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Many
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parents
want the
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children
to
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get
a successful in the
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future
.
Consequently
, the
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parent
demands the
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children
to
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study
for hours without stopping under increasing pressure. What’s more the
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parents
do not
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allow
their
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children
to play or explore outside home due to the
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parents
are afraid if their
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children
forget to
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study
and the
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future
will be bleak.

As
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parents
, they should not pressure their
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children
to
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study
for hours. As the result they forget to explore other things,
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because
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study
and playing are a unity that
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must
be balanced
,
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children
are not
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only
sitting at home reading books,
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but
they
also
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have to
explore the outside world to
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get
more experience
however
experiences
also
an
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important
part of the
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future
.
On the other hand
, as
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children
, we
also
need to be able to communicate with
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parents
, they can
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explain
that playing is not
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only
about promiscuity
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but
also
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adds
insight or experience which can be
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used
as a
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lesson


In conclusion
, the cause of
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stress
depends on how our situation is and how we organize our
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lives
. If we can control life well, the results will be fine too.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, stress-related illnesses are becoming increasing common. What do you think are the causes of this? What solution can you suggest

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
241 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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