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Nowadays people are moving to urban areas from rural areas what are the reason and what problem can cause

Nowadays people are moving to urban areas from rural areas what are the reason and what problem can cause 2b926
These days people are coming from outskirts to metropolitan cities to grab the job opportunities and for a better standard of living. At present these urban areas are becoming jobs hub for migrates who are seeking employment therefore, they are moving to these cities from rural areas. The upcoming paragraphs will delve the reasons and discuss the problems which can occur. To open the deliberation, The first tenable aetiology is that employment opportunities in cities are one of the main pull factors. Generally, society witnessed that in the small town there is a lack of jobs eventually the dwellers seek career opportunities in cosmopolitan provinces. Additionally, there a plethora of facilities which people can avails if they live in cities such as advanced healthcare institutes, well-renowned universities, transportation. For Instance, Gurgaon is a metropolis state and many multinational companies have established their offices here. It has become the financial banking centre after Mumbai. As a result, people are coming to this place for work. Similarly, People are attracted to an urban lifestyle and the ‘bright lights’ of city life. Despite having advantages of urbanisation there are some problems that happened when people move to big cities. Apparently, these places are already struggling with space. Moreover, having a large population puts too much pressure on natural resources, amenities and services. Mostly Migration increased the slum areas eventually it increases many problems such as unhygienic conditions, crime, pollution etc. To exemplify, quality of air in the metropolis is often polluted, because of fume from transportation and industrial activities. This will be certainly put harmful impacts on health, especially respiratory diseases. Hence, city life can be unhealthy and stressful. To recapitulate, although moving to metropolis enhances the probability of getting lucrative jobs and significantly improve the lifestyle in terms of healthcare and education. Thus, people tend to show a greater interest in shifting to these big cities. Still, it destroys the agricultural side and breeds. It also increased the numerous overpopulation problems in urban areas.
These days
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people
are coming from outskirts to metropolitan
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cities
to grab the
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job
opportunities and for a better standard of living. At present these urban
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areas
are becoming
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jobs
hub for migrates who are seeking employment
therefore
, they are moving to these
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cities
from rural
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areas
. The upcoming paragraphs will delve the reasons and discuss the
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problems
which can occur.

To open the deliberation, The
first
tenable
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aetiology
is that employment opportunities in
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cities
are one of the main pull factors.
Generally
, society witnessed that in the
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small
town there is a lack of
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jobs
eventually
the dwellers seek career opportunities in cosmopolitan provinces.
Additionally
, there a plethora of facilities which
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people
can avails if they
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live
in
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cities
such as advanced healthcare institutes, well-renowned universities, transportation.
For Instance
, Gurgaon is a metropolis state and
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many
multinational
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companies
have established their offices here. It has become the financial banking
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centre
after Mumbai.
As a result
,
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people
are coming to this place for work.
Similarly
,
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People
are attracted
to an urban lifestyle and the ‘bright lights’ of city life.

Despite having advantages of
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urbanisation
there are
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some
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problems
that happened when
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people
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move
to
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big
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cities
.
Apparently
, these places are already struggling with space.
Moreover
, having a large population puts too much pressure on natural resources, amenities and services.
Mostly
Migration increased the slum
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areas
eventually
it increases
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many
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problems
such as unhygienic conditions, crime, pollution etc. To exemplify, quality of air in the metropolis is
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often
polluted,
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because
of fume from transportation and industrial activities. This will be
certainly
put harmful impacts on health,
especially
respiratory diseases.
Hence
, city life can be unhealthy and stressful.

To recapitulate, although moving to metropolis enhances the probability of getting lucrative
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jobs
and
significantly
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improve
the lifestyle in terms of healthcare and education.
Thus
,
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people
tend to
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show
a greater interest in shifting to these
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big
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cities
.
Still
, it
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destroys
the agricultural side and breeds. It
also
increased the numerous overpopulation
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problems
in urban
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areas
.
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IELTS essay Nowadays people are moving to urban areas from rural areas what are the reason and what problem can cause

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
332 words
8
Overall Band Score
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