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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the solutions

Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the solutions 2dXJ
It is impossible to disprove that there are numerous students in the world who do not choose science as their majors. In this essay, I will address two main reasons and two adequate solutions for this phenomenon. Firstly, those majors are considered boring and very difficult to learn. Those majors not only require intelligence but also patience, so students tend to choose less demanding disciplines like business, education or art. In addition, science is an extremely competitive industry. For example, after struggling many years to graduate, they still need to specialize further in some particular science subjects to get a well-paid job. This may discourage students to choose science as their preferred major. A possible solution to this problem would be motivating students more during their study by rewarding more for the hard-working students, this because studying is the long journey and it is really hard to see the progress in the short term, this is especially true for science subjects where students have to put significant effort into their studying for a long period of time, short-time rewards allow them to see the results easier due to the fact that people are likely to do something more if they are rewarded more. Another solution is building a job reference system to help new graduate students find the jobs that fit their needs and expertise, this solution not only fills the needs of the job market but also make students feel less worry about developing their career and choose science majors. To conclude, the bottom line of this phenomenon is the difficulties of the science majors and finding job opportunities, we can solve this problem by rewarding equal effort from students and helping them to get the right jobs.
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students
in the world who do not
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choose
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science
as their
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majors
. In this essay, I will address two main reasons and two adequate
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solutions
for this phenomenon.

Firstly
, those
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majors
are considered
boring and
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very
difficult to learn. Those
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majors
not
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only
require intelligence
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but
also
patience,
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so
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students
tend to
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choose
less demanding disciplines like business, education or art.
In addition
,
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science
is an
extremely
competitive industry.
For example
, after struggling
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many
years to graduate, they
still
need to specialize
further
in
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some
particular
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science
subjects to
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get
a well-paid
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job
. This may discourage
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students
to
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choose
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science
as their preferred major.

A possible
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solution
to this problem would be motivating
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students
more during their study by rewarding more for the
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hard
-working
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students
, this
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because
studying is the long journey and it is
really
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hard
to
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see
the progress in the short term, this is
especially
true for
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science
subjects where
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students
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have to
put significant effort into their studying for a long period of time, short-time rewards
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allow
them to
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see
the results easier due to the fact that
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people
are likely to do something more if they
are rewarded
more. Another
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solution
is building a
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job
reference system to
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help
new graduate
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students
find the
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jobs
that fit their needs and expertise, this
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solution
not
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only
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job
market
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also
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make
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students
feel less worry about developing their career and
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choose
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science
majors.

To conclude
, the bottom line of this phenomenon is the difficulties of the
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science
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majors
and finding
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job
opportunities, we can solve this problem by rewarding equal effort from
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students
and helping them to
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get
the right
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jobs
.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the solutions

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289 words
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