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Nowadays many researches are being sponsored by private organizations. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of this trend?

Nowadays many researches are being sponsored by private organizations. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of this trend? xXB6
These days, private owner-ships have had a tendency to invest on researches. Although, Private organizations alongside the government can carry out some significant scientific projects, private sectors can be harmful by ignoring society’s issues. In my opinion, private organizations are far better off having funded on researches despite the challenges that they will face. The greatest benefit of sponsoring private organizations in researches is that it is created more vacancies to fulfill at the macro level. It is true that government has a lot of issues on their hand and it may be possible for them to overlook the potential of research projects and not fund due to financial deficit. Here is where private owner-ships can be helpful by investing their huge monetary resources in projects. For example, with the onset of the recession and reduction of government monetary resources in Iran, due to lack of private sectors, the number of projects diminished practically. So, private firms can provide the much necessary financial backing to researchers to carry on with their findings. In contrast, private funding does have some serious drawbacks. Since private organizations are driven by profit, they may accept those researches which are gained more income. By continuing this situation, those projects that have more social value but less monetary profit, are set aside and gradually fade. For example, there have been many cosmetic and pharmaceutical companies making false claims about their research just for more money. Therefore, profit for private owner-ships is a powerful factor that must be considered. In conclusion, sponsoring by private owner-ships is prevalent these days. Despite being cooperative about financial issues with government, one of their priorities is profit which can make serious social problems. In my view, although there are some negative point on this issue, supporting the researches by private organizations should be encouraged.
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owner-ships have had a tendency to invest on
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researches
. Although,
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Private
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organizations
alongside the
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government
can carry out
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some
significant scientific
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projects
,
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private
sectors can be harmful by ignoring society’s
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issues
. In my opinion,
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private
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organizations
are far better off having funded on
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researches
despite the challenges that they will face.

The greatest benefit of sponsoring
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private
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organizations
in
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researches
is that it
is created
more vacancies to fulfill at the macro level. It is true that
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government
has
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a lot of
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issues
on their hand and it may be possible for them to overlook the potential of
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research
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projects
and not fund due to financial deficit. Here is where
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private
owner-ships can be helpful by investing their huge monetary resources in
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projects
.
For example
, with the onset of the recession and reduction of
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government
monetary resources in Iran, due to lack of
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private
sectors, the number of
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projects
diminished
practically
.
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So
,
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private
firms can provide the much necessary financial backing to researchers to carry on with their findings.

In contrast
,
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private
funding does have
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some
serious drawbacks. Since
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private
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organizations
are driven
by
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profit
, they may accept those
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researches
which
are gained
more income. By continuing this situation, those
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projects
that have more social value
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but
less monetary
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profit
,
are set
aside and
gradually
fade.
For example
, there have been
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many
cosmetic and pharmaceutical
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companies
making false claims about their
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research
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for more money.
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,
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profit
for
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private
owner-ships is a powerful factor that
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must
be considered
.

In conclusion
, sponsoring by
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private
owner-ships is prevalent these days. Despite being cooperative about financial
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issues
with
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government
, one of their priorities is
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profit
which can
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make
serious social problems. In my view, although there are
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some
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negative
point on this
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issue
, supporting the
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researches
by
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private
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organizations
should
be encouraged
.
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IELTS essay Nowadays many researches are being sponsored by private organizations. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of this trend?

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