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Nomber of Job position graph

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The graph exhibits the number of positions in which people were being hired in three sections of economy in U. K over a decade between 2000 and 2010. The numbers are given in millions. In general, It’s striking that between 2000 and 2002, Private sector consisted of most of the employees, even so at the time, It was the figure of Public sector’s positions which came up first. To begin with details, if we look at Public sector, the number went through steadily at close to 40 million between 2000 to 2002. Then there was flunctuations between around 40 million and 50 million, which It’s highest level of employments here. At this point the figure began a gradual rise by just more than 50 million. As regards Self-employed sector had approximately the similar trend. Starting at less than 20 million, witnessing slight fluctutations until 2000, at which point the number went up steadily to 30 million in 2009. Finally, this level saw a levelling off until 2010. By contrast, despite starting strongly at around 50 million, the number of people employed in Private sector plunged over the ten year period. Nevertheless, the number remained stable and levelled off approximately during the years 2002 and 2009.

The graph exhibits the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
 of positions in which This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 were being hired
 in three sections of economy in U. K over a decade between 2000 and 2010. The You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
numbers
 are This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 in millions.

In general
, It’s striking that between 2000 and 2002, Private You use this word too often, consider replacing it withregionpartdistrictzone
sector
 consisted of most of the employees, even This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 at the time, It was the figure of Public You use this word too often, consider replacing it withregionpartdistrictzone
sector’s
 positions which came up first
.

To This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiatecommence
begin
 with This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :particulars
details
, if we look at Public You use this word too often, consider replacing it withregionpartdistrictzone
sector
, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
 went through steadily
 at close to 40 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withthousandtrillionmuchlottotalsum
million
Use "between" + "and" not "to."  Try this: "between 2000 and 2002".between 2000 and 2002
between 2000 to 2002
. Then there was Possible spelling mistake found.fluctuations
flunctuations
 between around 40 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withthousandtrillionmuchlottotalsum
million
 and 50 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withthousandtrillionmuchlottotalsum
million
, which Did you mean "its highest level"?Its highest level
It’s highest level
 of employments here. At this point the figure began a gradual rise by This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 more than 50 million.

“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
 regards Self-employed You use this word too often, consider replacing it withregionpartdistrictzone
sector
 had approximately the similar trend. Starting at less than 20 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withthousandtrillionmuchlottotalsum
million
, witnessing slight Possible spelling mistake found.fluctuations
fluctutations
 until 2000, at which point the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
 went up steadily
 to 30 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withthousandtrillionmuchlottotalsum
million
 in 2009. Finally
, this level This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
saw
 a levelling off until 2010.

By contrast, despite starting strongly
 at around 50 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withthousandtrillionmuchlottotalsum
million
, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
 of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 employed in Private You use this word too often, consider replacing it withregionpartdistrictzone
sector
 plunged over the When a number forms part of an adjectival compound, use a hyphen: "ten-year"ten-year
ten year
 period. Nevertheless
, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
 remained stable and levelled off approximately during the years 2002 and 2009. 