Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Most people think that children must stay busy with other children's company and other feels that they should know how to keep busy themselves. Discuss

Most people think that children must stay busy with other children's company and other feels that they should know how to keep busy themselves. Discuss dopNP
There is a popular opinion that children should be keep involved in other children's company during spare time while few have an impression that children should be able to stay alone in their own company. Both of these opinions will be discussed in this essay Firstly, children like to be surrounded by love and joy all the times no matter if these are provided by their parents or by their friends. They feel motivated and encouraged when others around them are performing one or more activities and try to learn these as well. When they are together, they try to copy and compete each other and learn many new things this way An example is montessori class where you see children try to learn a new rhyme. Mostly they even don't understand word to word meanings yet they try to make same sounds as peers are making and improve their language abilities. They learn more from each others abilities and skills as compare to what they learn from their parents at home
There is a popular opinion that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
involved in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
children's
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
during spare time while few have an impression that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
should be able to stay alone in their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
. Both of these opinions will
be discussed
in this
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
essay


Firstly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
like to
be surrounded
by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
and joy all the times no matter if these
are provided
by their parents or by their friends. They feel motivated and encouraged when others around them are performing one or more activities and try to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
these
as well
. When they are together, they try to copy and compete each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
new things this way An example is
Possible spelling mistake found.
montessori
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
where you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
try to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
a new rhyme.
Mostly
they even don't understand word to word meanings
yet
they try to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
same sounds as peers are making and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
their language abilities. They
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
more from each others abilities and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
as compare to what they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
from their parents at
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
home
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Most people think that children must stay busy with other children's company and other feels that they should know how to keep busy themselves. Discuss

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
171 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • Most people think that children must stay busy with other children's company and other feels that they should know how to keep busy themselves. Discuss