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Most of the people fail to connect the relevant of visiting museums. Why is it so? What can be done to clear this perception.

Most of the people fail to connect the relevant of visiting museums. Why is it so? What can be done to clear this perception. BJ7r5
The occasional visiting of museums fail to link the majority of people. For this, several reasons are there which cannot create the interest in people to visit museums. However, there are some solutions to clear this critical thinking of people. A museum is an education country fair that is rich with exciting things for individuals to explore and discover through touch and inquiry. Museums provides a unique opportunity for the people to explore various concepts of art galleries, social science and ancient history. However, vastly people feel bored and they visit museums just for entertainment rather than to gain knowledge. People feel that, they can get tired of walking for hours in museums and they might miss the socialising with friends and the beautiful outdoor experience in cities. The government and educational institutions are able to create awareness and can help to redeem this critical thinking of people about museums. The school should conduct the museum trips for students so that they get to know more about it and can enhance the interest in it. The government should support the museums for conducting seminars to create recognition and significance of museums. For example, the infrastructure of museums should be creative with a well organized board of explaining the history of a particular art, so that the people get interest to know about arts and museums. To conclude, museums are the merely place where we can get a perfect example of history, for that people think that it is a waste of time and failed to attach to it. For that government and educational institutions can take steps to create and enhance the interest of people and clear this critical concept.
The occasional visiting of
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fail to link the majority of
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people
. For this, several reasons are there which cannot
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create
the
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interest
in
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people
to visit
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.
However
, there are
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some
solutions to
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clear
this critical thinking of
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people
.

A
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museum
is an education country
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fair
that is
rich with exciting things for individuals to explore and discover through touch and inquiry.
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Museums provides
a unique opportunity for the
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people
to explore various concepts of art galleries, social science and ancient history.
However
,
vastly
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people
feel
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bored and
they visit
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museums
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just
for entertainment
rather
than to gain knowledge.
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People
feel that, they can
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get
tired of walking for hours in
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museums and
they might miss the
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socialising
with friends and the
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beautiful
outdoor experience in cities.

The
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government
and educational institutions are able to
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create
awareness and can
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help
to redeem this critical thinking of
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people
about
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museums
. The school should conduct the
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museum
trips for students
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so
that they
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get
to know more about it and can enhance the
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interest
in it.
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The
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government
should support the
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museums
for conducting seminars to
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create
recognition and significance of
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museums
.
For example
, the infrastructure of
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museums
should be creative with a well organized board of explaining the history of a particular art,
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so
that the
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
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interest
to know about arts and museums.

To conclude
,
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museums
are the
merely
place where we can
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get
a perfect example of history, for that
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that it is a waste of time and failed to attach to it. For that
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government
and educational institutions can take steps to
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create
and enhance the
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interest
of
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people
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
this critical concept.
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IELTS essay Most of the people fail to connect the relevant of visiting museums. Why is it so? What can be done to clear this perception.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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