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Most alcoholics purchase liquor legally. According to your point of view, should stores in general be legally allowed to sell liquor to alcoholics?

Most alcoholics purchase liquor legally. According to your point of view, should stores in general be legally allowed to sell liquor to alcoholics? m15Jq
The importance of alchool sales in a liquor store was always debatable and has now become more controversial. The significant influence of determinate points has sparked the controversy of this trend on regarding on selling liquor to alcoolics in recent years. It can be agreed that stores are not concerned about alcoholics. Therefore, this essay will elaborate how is important to know the rules and consequences around and how to prevent problems related to alcoholics and thus will lead to a logical conclusion. At the outset, there are numerous reasons why purchase liquor is not a huge concern to the sells venues but the most conspicuous one steams from the fact that alcoholics people can cause a lot of problems to the society. As an illustration, a University of Adelaide study has shown that the numbers of alcoholics people have increased dramatically since goverment allowed the purchase in the stores. However, shows that economy has increased in the same volume. Nevertheless, there remains some drawbacks which might overwhelm the significant influence of purchasing some types of liquors, but the most alarming one is rooted from the fact that they are the most expensive drinks. For instance, 30 ml of vodka can cost more than 15 dollars. Hence, having a alarming impact on the person who is consuming. From what has been discussed above, it can be concluded that the influence of purschase liquor in the stores have a positive and negative aspect from the stores and society being distinguished, also being acknowledge as an alarming concern that should not be overlooked.
The importance of
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alchool
sales in a
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liquor
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store
was always debatable and has
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now
become more controversial. The significant influence of determinate points has sparked the controversy of this trend on regarding on selling
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liquor
to
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alcoolics
in recent years. It can be
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agreed
that
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stores
are not concerned about
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alcoholics
.
Therefore
, this essay will elaborate how is
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important
to know the
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rules
and
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consequences around
and how to
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prevent
problems related to
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alcoholics
and
thus
will lead to a logical conclusion.

At the outset, there are numerous reasons why
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purchase
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liquor
is not a huge concern to the sells venues
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but
the most conspicuous one steams from the fact that
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alcoholics
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people
can cause
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a lot of
problems to the society. As an illustration, a University of Adelaide study has shown that the numbers of
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alcoholics
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people
have increased
dramatically
since
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goverment
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allowed
the
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purchase
in the
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stores
.
However
,
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shows
that economy has increased in the same volume.

Nevertheless
, there remains
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some
drawbacks which might overwhelm the significant influence of purchasing
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some
types of
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liquors
,
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but
the most alarming one
is rooted
from the fact that they are the most expensive drinks.
For instance
, 30 ml of vodka can cost more than 15 dollars.
Hence
, having
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a
alarming impact on the person who is consuming.

From what has
been discussed
above, it can
be concluded
that the influence of
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purschase
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liquor
in the
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stores
have a
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positive
and
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negative
aspect from the
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stores
and society
being distinguished
,
also
being
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acknowledge
as an alarming concern that should not
be overlooked
.
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IELTS essay Most alcoholics purchase liquor legally. According to your point of view, should stores in general be legally allowed to sell liquor to alcoholics?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6.0
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