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More government money should be invested in teaching science than other subjects for the country to develop and progress. Do you agree or disagree?

More government money should be invested in teaching science than other subjects for the country to develop and progress. nAxl
Although, many experts believe that for the development of a nation, an authority should spend more money to educate science rather than other courses. I think in a reverse manner and disagree with the given statement. My inclination is justified in the following paragraphs. Out of all the arguments, the foremost one to prove my opinion is, other subjects are also important in the country’s development. It cannot be denied that for a country to develop all possible subjects are equally important in their unique way. For example, accounts, management, history, languages, geography, statistics, and sports also play a crucial role to develop any country. This all together builds the strong economy of the particular country. Another reason to prove my point is that other subjects can help to backup science. For instance, language is important for the explanation of the concept, history is used to explain how technology advanced over time. Moreover, all people do not incline science because this can lead to unemployment and discontent amongst people. On the contrary, some people believe that science should get more funding from central authorities. They also believe that science is an epicenter of the progress of the nation. That is to say, developed countries like the United States have gain momentum mostly by funding a large number of science subjects. They spend money to make world-class labs in many schools. Thus, to wrap up my discussion, it can be said that although science is the center of the process and development of a country, it would be impractical and illogical for the government to invest more only in this topic. My reason proves the importance of the subject too.
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country’s
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country
to develop all possible
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subjects
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important
in their unique way.
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, accounts, management, history, languages, geography, statistics, and sports
also
play a crucial role to develop any
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country
. This all together builds the strong economy of the particular country.

Another reason to prove my point is that other
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subjects
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how technology advanced over time.
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get
more funding from central authorities. They
also
believe that
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science
is an epicenter of the progress of the nation.
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to say, developed
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countries
like the United States have gain momentum
mostly
by funding
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Thus
, to wrap up my discussion, it can
be said
that although
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science
is the center of the process and development of a
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country
, it would be impractical and illogical for the
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government
to invest more
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in this topic. My reason proves the importance of the
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IELTS essay More government money should be invested in teaching science than other subjects for the country to develop and progress.

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279 words
6.0
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