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More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution.

In this day and age, an increasing number of people tend to use their personal cars to commute, which can lead to some detrimental impacts on humans and the environment. This essay will discuss some problems of this phenomenon and propose a few appropriate measures to tackle this issue. One of the prominent issues related to this is that an increasing number of cars on the streets can lead to traffic congestion. This means that in the rush hour, it takes people a long time to wait and commute to work, which has disadvantageous effects on their work and life. One solution to this problem is for the government to raise the tax payment on cars or motorcycles and increase the price of petrol, which means that inhabitants have to pay lots of money to have their own cars. In this way, citizens might prefer using public transport than personal cars. In addition, administrations should improve the public transport services and offer a cheap price for residents, which might encourage them to use public transport more frequently. Another worrying problem is that the excessive use of private cars can lead to some issue about the environment. To illustrate, cars which run on petrol or diesel will release a large amount of harmful exhaust fume into the atmosphere, which has made the air become polluted. According to recent research, the air pollution index in Beijing exceeds the alarming level because there are lots of people using their own cars to commute. The feasible solution to this problem would be for city inhabitants to strive to reduce their dependence on cars. For instance, they can walk to the shops nearby whenever they need to buy groceries without driving, which not only helps reduce air pollution but also enhance their well-being. In conclusion, the above-mentioned facts have outlined the reasons as well as the measures of this issue. From my perspective, the responsibility for solving this problem lies with the government.
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people
tend to
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use
their personal
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cars
to commute, which can lead to
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some
detrimental impacts on humans and the environment. This essay will discuss
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some
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problems
of this phenomenon and propose a few appropriate measures to tackle this issue.

One of the prominent issues related to this is that an increasing number of
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cars
on the streets can lead to traffic congestion. This means that in the rush hour, it takes
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
a long time to wait and commute to work, which has disadvantageous effects on their work and life. One solution to this
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problem
is for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
to raise the tax payment on
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cars
or motorcycles and increase the price of petrol, which means that inhabitants
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have to
pay lots of money to have their
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own
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cars
. In this way, citizens might prefer using public transport than personal
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cars
.
In addition
, administrations should
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improve
the public transport services and offer a
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cheap
price for residents, which might encourage them to
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use
public transport more
frequently
.

Another worrying
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problem
is that the excessive
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use
of private
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cars
can lead to
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some
issue about the environment. To illustrate,
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cars
which run on petrol or diesel will release a large amount of harmful exhaust fume into the atmosphere, which has made the air become polluted. According to recent research, the air pollution index in Beijing exceeds the alarming level
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because
there are lots of
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people
using their
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own
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cars
to commute. The feasible solution to this
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problem
would be for city inhabitants to strive to
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reduce
their dependence on
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cars
.
For instance
, they can walk to the shops nearby whenever they need to
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buy
groceries without driving, which not
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only
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helps
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reduce
air pollution
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but
also
enhance their well-being.

In conclusion
, the above-mentioned facts have outlined the reasons
as well
as the measures of this issue. From my perspective, the responsibility for solving this
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problem
lies with the
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government
.
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IELTS essay More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
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