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More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people say that increasing the price of fattening foods will solve this problem. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

In today's Era, consumption of foods which are rich in fat have been increased. Even though being aware of side effects due to such type of food, people are increasingly consuming fast food for the sake of taste. The side effects are much severe and they can be responsible for detrimental effect on your health. While incrementing the price of food containing fat can be justifiable to some extent, I also argue that there are even more prominent ways which can be more beneficial in decreasing the intake of the fast food. Nowadays for the sake of enjoyment people spend immense amount of money. However, if a person is foodie and he finds eating different variety of food which are not at all healthy is enjoyment for him. Due to the fact at that instance the person would not care of spending great amount of money. As a result, increasing prices of fat containing food is not at all a relevant step. On the contrary, there are various steps which can be more beneficial and effective for decrementing the intake of the fast foods. One of the significant step is spreading awareness regarding the adverse effect of fattening foods. If different social media platforms are used in proper way then awareness can be spread significantly. However, nowadays almost every single person is utilizing social media platforms. For example, if a famous personality of politics or films encourages people by promoting the adverse effect of fattening food through any campaign then it can give positive outcomes. To conclude, according to me increasing the price of fattening food will not give fruitful output. However, Government should promote or increase awareness of people by educating them through some types of campaigns.
In
today
's Era, consumption of
foods
which are rich in
fat
have
been increased
.
Even though
being aware of side effects due to such type of
food
,
people
are
increasingly
consuming
fast
food
for the sake of taste. The side effects are much
severe and
they can be responsible for detrimental
effect
on your health.

While incrementing the price of
food
containing
fat
can be justifiable to
some
extent, I
also
argue that there are even more prominent ways which can be more beneficial in decreasing the intake of the
fast
food
. Nowadays for the sake of enjoyment
people
spend immense amount of money.
However
, if a person is
foodie and
he finds eating
different
variety of
food
which are not at all healthy is enjoyment for him. Due to the fact at that instance the person would not care of spending great amount of money.
As a result
, increasing prices of
fat
containing
food
is not at all a relevant step.

On the contrary
, there are various steps which can be more beneficial and effective for decrementing the intake of the
fast
foods
. One of the significant step is spreading awareness regarding the adverse
effect
of fattening
foods
. If
different
social media platforms are
used
in proper way then awareness can
be spread
significantly
.
However
, nowadays almost every single person is utilizing social media platforms.
For example
, if a
famous
personality of politics or films encourages
people
by promoting the adverse
effect
of fattening
food
through any campaign then it can give
positive
outcomes.

To conclude
, according to me increasing the price of fattening
food
will not give fruitful output.
However
,
Government
should promote or increase awareness of
people
by educating them through
some
types of campaigns.
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IELTS essay More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people say that increasing the price of fattening foods will solve this problem.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
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