Search
Tools
Listening
Reading
1. Academic
2. General
Writing
1. IELTSWriting Checker
2. IELTS Writing Samples
Speaking

Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.

Many students take part time jobs while studying at university. Do you think its a good idea or a bad idea?

Many students take part time jobs while studying at university. Do you think its a good idea or a bad idea? awJ29

Nowadays, many university students prefer to take part- time employment at near by eateries or petrol pump to support themselves. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I intend to discuss the positive and negative sides to this. However, I believe the positive outweighs the negative effect. Firstly, securing a part-time job is important for students, especially international students because it gives a boost to their self-esteem. When the student starts university, he/she is at a tender age of 18, unaware of the challenges they would encounter. This step would give them the confidence to face the outside world. In addition to this, it would give a sense of financial independence when they start fending for themselves. Furthermore, the parents would also not feel financially burdened especially for internationally students. Parents back at home take student loans to send their children abroad for their studies. They find it difficult to keep up with the living expenses of foreign countries, at times the living expenses per month for the child exceeds their monthly income. Hence, if the child gets a temporary job, it is a win-win situation for both the parents and kids. However, there is another side to the story. Students with the intention of earning more money especially in foreign currency neglect the sole purpose of their visit i. e. , study harder and create a bright future. For instance, my cousin had gone to the United States for his master’s degree and to support his living expenses he took up a job at Burger King. He was earning quite a lot in dollar and the greed to earn more led him to undertake double shifts that ultimately resulted in suspension of his term since he did not attend lectures. Tus to recapitulate, it is good to take up part time employment to bear one’s living expenses, but it is crucial to maintain a balance between the two and not fall prey to earning a quick buck at the expense of neglecting the matriculation program.

Nowadays, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 university You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
students
 prefer to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :participate
take part
- time employment at Did you mean "nearby"?nearby
near by
 eateries or petrol pump to support themselves. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I intend to discuss the This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:beneficial
positive
 and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:adverse
negative
 sides to this. However
, I believe the This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:beneficial
positive
 outweighs the This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:adverse
negative
 effect.

Firstly
, securing a part-time job is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
 for You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
students
, especially
 international You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
students
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 it gives a boost to their self-esteem. When the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
student
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiates
starts
 university, he/she is at a tender age of 18, unaware of the challenges they would encounter. This step would give them the confidence to face the outside world. In addition
 to this, it would give a sense of financial independence when they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiate
start
 fending for themselves.

Furthermore
, the parents would also
 not feel financially
 burdened especially
 for internationally
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
students
. Parents back at home take You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
student
 loans to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :transmit
send
 their children abroad for their studies. They find it difficult to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retain
keep
 up with the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbreathingcontemporary
living
 expenses of foreign countries, at times the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbreathingcontemporary
living
 expenses per month for the child exceeds their monthly income. Hence
, if the child This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquires
gets
 a temporary job, it is a win-win situation for both the parents and kids.

However
, there is another side to the story. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
Students
 with the intention of earning more money especially
 in foreign currency neglect the sole purpose of their visit There should be no space here: "i.e.".i.e.
i. e.
Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma,
 ,
 study harder and create a bright future. For instance
, my cousin had gone to the United States for his master’s degree and to support his You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbreathingcontemporary
living
 expenses he took up a job at Burger King. He was earning quite a lot in dollar and the greed to earn more led him to undertake double shifts that ultimately
 resulted in suspension of his term since he did not attend lectures.

Possible spelling mistake found.Tu'sTuUsThusBusGus
Tus
 to recapitulate, it is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
 to take up This word is normally spelled with hyphen.part-time
part time
 employment to bear one’s You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbreathingcontemporary
living
 expenses, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 it is crucial to maintain a balance between the two and not fall prey to earning a quick buck at the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withloanrateinsuranceprice tagsuminvestment
expense
 of neglecting the matriculation program. 