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*Many people who leave school hold a negative attitude towards learning. why does this happen ? how to solve this problem?*

*Many people who leave school hold a negative attitude towards learning. why does this happen? how to solve this problem? * pR6mD
Unfortunately a number of individuals harbour a negative impact towards education while quitting institution. Sadly the immense expenditure of study deter them to pursue further, but hopefully financial aid and free learning can change their opinion for schools. Anyhow, the essay ll examine the root and suitable solution in the following paragraphs. Broadly speaking, expensive school fee is the primary reason to enforce one to drop off school. T put simply, most of the time, students belong to middle class family who can not afford tuition fee, stationary and proper uniform, hence, ended up leaving acquiring knowledge. For example, according to news 60 % of children in Bihar state have given up study after passing 5th grade. Truly, they are not even able to arrange food, twice a day, that is why learning is extremely impossible for those poor people. No doubt, providing scholarships and free education can inspire a large number of pioneers to enjoy the opportunity of learning. Certainly, with financial rewards they will opt for their favourite majors, purchase best books and wear appropriate uniforms. In addition cost free study will keep them attached with the significance of knowledge. For example, in Punjab government schools have witnessed a rise in number of disciples after the introduction of of extra 2000 rupees as monthly allowance for study for EWS students. To wrap up, children should not be deprived of education because of high spendings, also authorities should launch new schemes to sustain learning.
Unfortunately a number of individuals
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negative
impact towards education while quitting institution.
Sadly
the immense expenditure of
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study
deter them to pursue
further
,
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but
hopefully
financial aid and free
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learning
can
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change
their opinion for
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schools
. Anyhow, the essay ll examine the root and suitable solution in the following paragraphs.

Broadly
speaking, expensive
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school
fee is the primary reason to enforce one to drop off
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school
. T put
simply
, most of the time, students belong to middle
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class
family who can not afford tuition fee, stationary and proper uniform,
hence
, ended up leaving acquiring knowledge.

For example
, according to news 60 % of children in Bihar state have
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given
up
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study
after passing 5th grade.
Truly
, they are not even able to arrange food, twice a day,
that is
why
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learning
is
extremely
impossible for those poor
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people
.

No doubt, providing scholarships and free education can inspire
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a large number of
pioneers to enjoy the opportunity of
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learning
.
Certainly
, with financial rewards they will opt for their
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favourite
majors,
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purchase
best books and wear appropriate uniforms. In
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addition
cost free
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study
will
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keep
them attached with the significance of knowledge.
For example
, in Punjab
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government
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schools
have witnessed a rise in number of disciples after the introduction
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of of
extra 2000 rupees as monthly allowance for
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study
for EWS students.

To wrap up, children should not
be deprived
of education
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because
of high
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spendings
,
also
authorities should launch new schemes to sustain
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learning
.
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IELTS essay *Many people who leave school hold a negative attitude towards learning. why does this happen? how to solve this problem? *

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
245 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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