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Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits. Discuss both views and your opinion.

Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits. 7wXX
As a sportslover, I look forward to sporting events. I take pride in mantaining my sporting events calendar. In the past few years, we have seen that such events have been marred by controversy. There were protests in Brazil before the 2014 Rio Olympics and protests in India before the 2012 CommonWealth Games. Should countries organise such spectacles? Organizing a sports event offers many advantages to the host country. It is a matter of pride to be able to organize such large scale events. These events also benefit sportpersons of the home country. They tend to perform better. They compete in familiar environments and are supported by thousands of fans. Not surprisingly, the Indian team won the 2011 Cricket World Cup that was held in India. Hosting a sports event also forces the host country to upgrade its infrastructure: aiports, roads, hotels and stadiums. However, there is another side to the story. Many people view the money spent on organizing these events as a waste of ressources. Instead, the ressources should be allocated to growing the economy and reducing unemployment. People in developing countries feel that the government should be spending money on generating jobs and reducing poverty instead of spending on building sports stadiums. Corruption is also a concern. Large infrastructure contracts are handed out in a shady manner. A huge scandal interrupted after the 2012 Commenwealth Games in India and the Head of the organizing committee had to tender his resignation. As a sportslover, I believe that sports must go on. Sports is about never say die spirit, it is about competing hard and yet following the rules. In a world where countries are embroiled in conflicts, sports events represent global solidarity. Atheletes from all over the world come together. So countries should continue organizing such spectacles. As with any grand endeavor, there will always be risks and rewards.
As a
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sportslover
, I look forward to sporting
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events
. I take pride in
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mantaining
my sporting
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events
calendar. In the past few years, we have
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seen
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that


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such
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events
have
been marred
by controversy. There were protests in Brazil
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before
the 2014 Rio Olympics and protests in India
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before
the 2012
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CommonWealth


Games. Should
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countries
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organise
such spectacles?

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Organizing
a
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sports
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event
offers
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many
advantages to the host
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country
. It is a matter of pride to be able to
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organize
such large scale
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events
.

These
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events
also
benefit

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sportpersons
of the home
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country
. They tend to perform better. They compete in familiar environments and
are supported
by thousands of fans. Not
surprisingly
,

the Indian team won the 2011 Cricket World Cup that
was held
in India. Hosting a
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sports
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event
also
forces the host
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country
to upgrade its

infrastructure:
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aiports
, roads, hotels and stadiums.

However
, there is another side to the story.
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Many
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people
view the money spent on
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organizing
these
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events
as a waste of
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ressources
.

Instead
, the
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ressources
should
be allocated


to growing the economy and reducing unemployment.
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People
in developing
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countries
feel that the
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government
should be spending money

on generating jobs and reducing poverty
instead
of spending on building
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sports
stadiums. Corruption is
also
a concern. Large infrastructure contracts
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are


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handed
out
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in a shady manner
. A huge scandal interrupted after the 2012
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Commenwealth
Games in India and the Head of the
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organizing
committee had to tender his resignation.

As a
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sportslover
, I believe that
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sports
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must
go on.
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Sports
is about never say
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die
spirit, it is about competing
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hard
and
yet
following the
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rules
.

In a world where
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countries
are embroiled
in conflicts,
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sports
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events
represent global solidarity.
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Atheletes
from all over the world
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come
together.

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So
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countries
should continue
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organizing
such spectacles. As with any grand endeavor, there will always be
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risks
and rewards.
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IELTS essay Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits.

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