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many people think that it good for young to copy idols from magazines.

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In this contemporary era, it is not uncommon to notice that youngster is following the footsteps of film stars. Mass media plays an indispensable role in this. It has become a trend to mimic stars from head to toe. People seek inspiration from them and study them through various articles in newspapers, magazines, and television. To commence with, mass media is a prominent feature in using celebrities for their TRP purpose to earn more. Not only social media and mass media has a predominant impact on the young generation but also on people living in the community. For advertising renowned stars are paid enormous fees. Hence, the product can have aftermath on society, and more it is sold to earn profit. For instance, people buy luxurious bags which are endorsed by top actresses and actors to look like that even if they do not have that much income. As a consequence, youth pasture their parents to get these goods which results in monthly unbalance of budget. On the other hand, it is not prominent to imitate famous personalities as they get paid for wearing branded clothes and accessories. It is imprudent to mimic them as it has a negative influence on people living in society. To epitome, for affluent people, it is convenient for them to buy branded things which are endorsed by top paid celebrities which will be not only exorbitant but also redundant to buy by impoverished and middle-class. Thus, it will create chaos in the family which will lead to emotional and mental stress. To recapitulate, in my perspective it is imprudent to copy well-known artists from any media or dailies and it is best to bestow knowledge to young one’s from the beginning by teaching them etiquettes.
In this contemporary era, it is not uncommon to notice that youngster is following the footsteps of film stars. Mass
media
plays an indispensable role in this. It has become a trend to mimic stars from head to toe.
People
seek inspiration from them and study them through various articles in newspapers, magazines, and television.

To commence with, mass
media
is a prominent feature in using celebrities for their TRP purpose to earn more. Not
only
social
media
and mass
media
has a predominant impact on the young generation
but
also
on
people
living in the community. For advertising renowned stars
are paid
enormous fees.
Hence
, the product can have aftermath on society, and more it
is sold
to earn profit.
For instance
,
people
buy
luxurious bags which
are endorsed
by top actresses and actors to look like that even if they do not have that much income. As a consequence, youth pasture their parents to
get
these
goods
which results in monthly unbalance of budget.

On the other hand
, it is not prominent to imitate
famous
personalities as they
get
paid for wearing branded clothes and accessories. It is imprudent to mimic them as it has a
negative
influence on
people
living in society. To epitome, for affluent
people
, it is convenient for them to
buy
branded things which
are endorsed
by top paid celebrities which will be not
only
exorbitant
but
also
redundant to
buy
by impoverished and middle-
class
.
Thus
, it will create chaos in the family which will lead to emotional and mental
stress
.

To recapitulate, in my perspective it is imprudent to copy well-known artists from any
media
or dailies and it is best to bestow knowledge to young one’s from the beginning by teaching them
etiquettes
.
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IELTS essay many people think that it good for young to copy idols from magazines.

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