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Many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work.

Many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. PaYJ
There are number of people argue that for having a good job it is prominent to graduate from university. While there are other groups of people claim that it is better to start work after school I believe university education has a significant place on children life to getting a good job. Nowadays, there are various youngsters that have dream about good and well-qualified life. For having a good life the good job is priority aim of the children. Firstly, study in university is the way to guarantee them to achieve the life that their desire. For example, higher education helps them to discover their talents on different courses. The student that study engineering could find he or she interest s in purchasing or management departments. That mean's when he or she graduate could find a job in both related areas. Secondly, university education is not consist on courses it also makes a colorful environment to students to make new friendship. For instance, after finishing university this friendship could helps to find a good job. As a result the university is not the place only for education it also appropriate area for human relationship. According to my knowledge, work and gain experience after school in early age might help to youngsters to achieve their desire life in a short way. For instance, they can buy a car or mobile phone without waiting a long time. However, they could not become a qualified professional such as an engineer or a doctor. The people who prefer to work after school most probably would be a car mechanic or typical worker. Another side is, the experience that children gain in their job has a limit. For example, while students learn in distinctive fields many things, others only learn specific field that chosen as a job. As a consequence, the people that choose to work without going to university could not work with a qualified professional employer. In conclusion, for getting a good job it is better to have a higher education instead of work in an unqualified job.
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job
it is prominent to graduate from
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university
. While there are other groups of
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people
claim that it is better to
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start
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work
after school I believe
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university
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education
has a significant place on children
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life
to getting a
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good
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job
. Nowadays, there are various youngsters that have dream about
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good
and well-qualified
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life
. For having a
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good
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life
the
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good
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job
is priority aim of the children.
Firstly
, study in
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university
is the way to guarantee them to achieve the
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life
that their desire.
For example
, higher
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education
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helps
them to discover their talents on
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different
courses. The student that study engineering could find he or she
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interest
s in purchasing or management departments. That
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mean's
when he or she graduate could find a
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job
in both related areas.
Secondly
,
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university
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education
is not
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consist
on courses it
also
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makes
a colorful environment to students to
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make
new friendship.
For instance
, after finishing
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university
this friendship could
The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: "help"
helps
to find a
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good
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job
.
As a result
the
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university
is not the place
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only
for
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education
it
also
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appropriate
area for human relationship. According to my knowledge,
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work
and gain experience after school in early age might
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help
to youngsters to achieve their desire
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life
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in a short way
.
For instance
, they can
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buy
a car or mobile phone without waiting a long time.
However
, they could not become a qualified professional such as an engineer or a doctor. The
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people
who prefer to
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work
after school most
probably
would be a car mechanic or typical worker. Another side is, the experience that children gain in their
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job
has a limit.
For example
, while students learn in distinctive fields
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many
things, others
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only
learn specific field that chosen as a
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job
. As a consequence, the
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people
that choose to
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work
without going to
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university
could not
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work
with a qualified professional employer.
In conclusion
, for getting a
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good
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job
it is better to have a higher
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education
instead
of
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work
in an unqualified
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job
.
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IELTS essay Many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
345 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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